Talk:Sorry Mrs. Carter/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 22:10, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead[edit]

The song was released On August 4, 2014 → It was released on August 4, 2014, through XY (platform, which way?)

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:41, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

remix of the single → Remove overfluous "the"

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:41, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Flawless" → add year of release in brackets

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:41, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

In the lyrics, Liv portrays herself → The track's lyrical content portrays Liv

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:41, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Liv rapped the lyrics → present tense

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:41, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The video has earned over two million views less than a week after its release. → The visual has earned...

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:41, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The song was listed as one of the top ten → "Sorry Mrs. Carter" was listed in the top ten of

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:41, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

for the weeks of August 9, 2014 and August 23, 2014 → for two weeks in 2014 (too detailed for lead section)

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:41, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox[edit]

flawless ;)

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 23:41, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Concept and development[edit]

the song, promoting it as an → the song as an

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

she explained that she recorded the song → the rapper explained that she recorded the track

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Flawless" → add year of release in brackets

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Liv uploaded the song only "a few days" after the release of the "Flawless" remix. → Subsequently, Liv uploaded her song only a few days after the release of the "Flawless" remix.

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Prior to the song's release → Prior to the recording's premiere (word repetition)

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Unlink "tabloids" here

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Kendrick Lamar.[8] According to Bustle, "The Invasion" is "[Liv's] quest → Kendrick Lamar, which—according to Bustle—portrays "[Liv's] quest

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Composition and lyrical interpretation[edit]

forty-four seconds → 44 seconds

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The beat → Its beat

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

single "Ms. Jackson".[13] Tim Surrette of TV Guide noted that the use of the sample was extremely prominent. → single "Ms. Jackson" (YEAR OF RELEASE), whose use ... described as being extremely prominent.

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Liv details her past relationship with rapper Jay Z → wait? Did she really have a relationship with him? I'm a little bit confused because in the lead you say "alleged relationship"

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Throughout the song, she portrays herself → Throughout the song, she is further portrayed

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

toward both artists → towards both artists

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

which includes: "I was → including, "I was

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The lyrics contain → The lyrical content contains (word repetition)

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"I Just Wanna Love U (Give It 2 Me)", and "99 Problems", "Girls, Girls, Girls" → year of release in brackets to all + enlist them correctly with the "and" placed at the end

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

year of release to Beyoncé's songs as well.

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

In the song, Liv denies → In the track, the rapper denies

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

intimacy; she does this by rapping lyrics such as → intimacy by rapping lyrics such as,

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Unlink "chorus" both here and in the audio file description

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

include: "Why → include, "Why

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Beyoncé. It ends with Liv saying "The → Beyoncé, and ends with Live saying, "The

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception[edit]

negative responses → singular form

It should be plural since it is referring to the responses of multiple critics. Aoba47 (talk) 23:43, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

the side chick. Carter followed → the side chick, with him following

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:43, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

the lyrics "You got → the lyrics, "You got

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:43, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

viewed the song → viewed the track (alternation)

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:43, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Bustle's Kaitlin Reilly → Echoing this thought, Bustle's Kaitlin Reilly

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:43, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The single was described → The recording was described (alternation)

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:43, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Beyoncé's fans negatively → The singer's fans also negatively

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:43, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

referenced in the song → referenced in the track (alternation)

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:43, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

however, called the song → Remove "however"

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:43, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Place this last para between the second and the third one, please

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:43, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Music video[edit]

The music video → An accompanying music video for the single

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:44, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Link "YouTube" to its respective article on Wikipedia

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:44, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

the video was "homemade" with → the visual was homemade, with the rapper

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:44, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

a bikini and shawl and drinking wine → a bikini and shawl, and drinking wine (as a new idea starts here in the sentence)

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:44, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

prominently throughout the video.[14] One of the magazine clippings includes → prominently throughout the video, with one of the including

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:44, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The video ends → The clip ends (word rep.)

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:44, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The video has earned → It has earned

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:44, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

viewed the video → viewed the visual (word rep.)

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:44, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

It was regraded → It was further regraded

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:44, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Kaitlin Reilly. Reilly concluded → Kaitlin Reilly, who concluded

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:44, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Release history[edit]

Use "scope="row" for "Country"

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:44, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Unlink formats and label

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:44, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Other stuff[edit]

Copy-violation[edit]

25.95% is ok!

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 23:46, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Images and others[edit]

Article is perfectly illustrated by audio sample.

Thank you! If you did have the misfortune of actually listening to the audio sample, I'm sorry about that lol. Aoba47 (talk) 23:46, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Links[edit]

No problems here!

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 23:46, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

References[edit]

Avoid shouting in ref 1

Done. Aoba47 (talk) 23:46, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article.

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 23:46, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

No dead links! Good job!

Thank you Aoba47 (talk) 23:46, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: Ping me when you're ready with this. Best regards and good luck, Cartoon network freak (talk) 23:06, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: Oh, so you're still here? Cartoon network freak (talk) 23:36, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: I have addressed all of your comments. Let me know if there is anything else that I can do to improve the article. Aoba47 (talk) 23:46, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: The article already was GA status before reviewing it, but now it's even better. Gladly passing, of course. Cartoon network freak (talk) 23:48, 4 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.