Talk:Soul Sound/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:50, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"during her trip to" -> "during a trip" (unless you're sure she's only ever made on trip there?)
"where she was inspired to compose it based upon her experience there." seems a little weak, maybe "based on her experiences there."
"The song was released" -> "It was released...
As this is (or should be) written in Brit Eng, demeanor should be demeanour.
""Soul Sound" at Manchester Ampersand and" what is this? And why is Manchester linked?
", having peaked at number" ->", peaking at"
"controversially " you mention that twice but don't explain it.
" in London, England" no need to link common geographical terms.
Picture used in the Reception section seems arbitrary and unrelated.
"unsatisfied" or "dissatisfied"?
Ref 3 should be The Herald, not Herald Scotland.
Sydney Morning Herald should be The Sydney Morning Herald.

I'll put it on hold for a week to see if these issues get resolved. Let me know when you're done. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:33, 13 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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