Talk:Taken by a Stranger/GA1
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Reviewer: MaranoFan (talk · contribs) 17:11, 26 November 2018 (UTC)
I'll be reviewing this article.--NØ 17:11, 26 November 2018 (UTC)
Review
[edit]Lead
[edit]- The cover artwork used in this article seems to have more faded colors than the one on iTunes [1]. I also suggest replacing it with a PNG file.
- I don't quite know how to change the format of an uploaded file on Wikipedia. Any chance you could do that for me?
- "Lena performed on a dark stage enhanced with rays of light" -- Just say "light rays" instead of "rays of light"
Done
- "the recording contradicted Lena's past good girl public image" -- "the recording strayed from Lena's past good girl public image" or "the recording was a departure from Lena's past good girl public image"
Done
- ""Taken by a Stranger" has been covered by acts such as German group The BossHoss in 2017" -- You really don't need to mention the year here
Done Removed
Background and release
[edit]- "while Stefan Raab and Reinhard Schaub handled production" -- Add an "its" before "production"
Done
- "With a length of three minutes and 25 seconds" -- Per MOS:NUM, use all numbers or all words, but not both.. aka "three minutes and twenty-five seconds" or "3 minutes and 25 seconds".
Done I know that you should write out only numbers under 11, but I'll do it your way...
Composition and lyrical interpretation
[edit]- with is instrumentation consisting of "weird, spooky and confusing sounds" -- You can take "sounds" out of the quote
Done
- "The woman leaves though the man wants a relationship" -- This would read better as "The man wants to pursue a relationship but the woman leaves"
Done
- "Abou-Dakn felt the mention of chairs and blindfolding in the song" -- Just say "he felt the mention..." because his full name is mentioned in the sentence right before.
Done
Reception and accolades
[edit]- This section would be better titled just "Reception" since it doesn't make mention of many accolades
- Accolades are awards, which are definitely also part of this section. I think the section name should stay like that...
- "Before the Eurovision contest, oddsmakers had Lena reaching the top ten." -- This sentence can be removed, it doesn't fit in this section
Done
- "At the 2011 1Live Krone Awards, "Taken by a Stranger" was nominated in the Best Single category." -- Since this award show doesn't have a Wikipedia page, I would suggest removing it from here per WP:INDISCRIMINATE. They're not notable awards
- This award is notable and has a Wikipedia page in German: [2]. It is "Germany's biggest Radio-Award".
Promotion and other usage
[edit]- "Wolf Gresnz filmed it "in a hurry" in Berlin, Germany" -- "in a hurry" is completely useless in this sentence, remove it
Done
- ""Taken by a Stranger" was promoted by several live performances" -- Replace "by" with "with" or "through"
Done
At Eurovision
[edit]Points awarded to Germany is just made up of two lines and doesn't need to be a separate subsection
Done
Conclusion
[edit]The article is placed on hold and will be promoted if changes are made. Cheers!--NØ 17:11, 26 November 2018 (UTC)
- @MaranoFan: Hi and thank you VERY much for conducting this review (I've been waiting for months to get one of my GANS reviewed!). I have responded to your comments! Best regards; Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:16, 26 November 2018 (UTC)
- Passed!--NØ 21:46, 26 November 2018 (UTC)
- @MaranoFan: Hi and thank you VERY much for conducting this review (I've been waiting for months to get one of my GANS reviewed!). I have responded to your comments! Best regards; Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:16, 26 November 2018 (UTC)
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.