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Reviewer:Legolas (talk2me) 07:16, 14 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Well, well, aren't you a lucky son of a gun? Long wait huh? — Legolas (talk2me) 07:16, 14 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Haha yes it's been a while, thought about removing it for a while. Think I nominated it a bit hastily but a review would be helpful to develop the article and if it does not pass at this stage a renomination would be most likely. Thanks in advance, --FeuDeJoie (talk) 19:50, 15 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox
  • 2008–2010 --> 2008–10 per MOS:DATERANGE
  • If its in the soul genre, you don't need to include neo soul, as the main soul covers it.
  • Add alternate text for the cover image per WP:ALT, to help in readers who are visually impaired.
  • Since this is a concept album and is part of a series, a chronology is needed in this case, irrespective of the first release being an EP.
Lead
  • My main concern is that the lead is not according to WP:LEAD, meaning that although it summarizes the article, it nevertheless writes a pretty small synopsis. Seeing the article body length, I would expect it to be at least three paras.
  • released May 18, 2010, on Wondaland Arts --> released May 18, 2010, by Wondaland Arts
  • You need to somehow introduce the fact that the album is a concept album and then say "It consists of the second and third parts to Monáe's Metropolis concept series".
  • There is no mention of the release and promotion parts.
  • number 17 --> number 17, non-breaking space is needed always between a numeral and an alphabet.
  • Total sales of the album in US are courtesy Nielsen SoundScan, so you need to mention that.
Background
  • The ArchAndroid is the follow-up to Janelle Monáe's debut EP Metropolis: Suite I (The Chase) (2007) --> The ArchAndroid is the follow-up to Janelle Monáe's debut EP, Metropolis: Suite I (The Chase) (2007), and....
  • she was inspired by the quote --> to do what?
  • discussed her incorporation of the android as a metaphor for a minority and the role of the story's protagonist in an interview for Blues & Soul, stating --> Grammatical error
  • Monáe has said about the recording sessions --> Make it a new para
  • the ArchAndroid I went through a very --> The ArchAndroid, I went through a very
  • Why is the studio name in italics?
  • link Turkey, Prague and Atlanta, not common place names
Music
  • You are talking about the musical style and its content, so this section name can easily be named Composition
  • all the things I love - scores for films like --> En-dash instead of a normal dash
  • Monáe has stated that the album's lyrical themes and storyline were heavily influenced by Fritz Lang's Metropolis. --> needs source
  • Can yuo avoid repetition of the phrase "The track" in this whole section?
Release
  • In promotion of the album --> For promoting the album,
  • link youtube
  • Monae performed to her network debut --> I don't follow
  • Again, continuous repetition of Monae
  • sp mistake --> wwas
  • In singles, when you say that a video was released, please be more explanatory, what did the video show, reception etc.
Reception
  • The whole chart performance section doesnot flow well, and is a week-by-week analysis with no conjencture. Please rephrase the whole section.
  • Credit the total US sales to Nielsen SoundScan.
Charts

Needs work. Seven days on hold. — Legolas (talk2me) 10:23, 25 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

A little bit of work's been done, but not much. Should it be failed? Wizardman Operation Big Bear 04:42, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Actually the nominator has informed me that he's taking an exam and will be back after a week to fully address the comments. Hence I'm waiting to see if he does that. — Legolas (talk2me) 04:52, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Looks fine by me. I'm happy to pass this as GA. — Legolas (talk2me) 14:23, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]