Talk:The Boat Race 1876/GA1

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Reviewer: Seattle (talk · contribs) 23:10, 2 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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Dodd, Christopher (1983) is unused and should be removed
Gone. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:42, 3 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The lead could better summarize the article, with a sentence on the "crews" section and a sentence on the progression of the race
Expanded. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:42, 3 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

mix of perfect tense and non-perfect tense in the "Background" section
Unmixed. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:42, 3 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The race was umpired by Joseph William Chitty who had rowed for Oxford twice in 1849 (in the March and December races) and the 1852 race, while the starter was Edward Searle can you remove the passive in this sentence entirely, and merge it with the second paragraph? To something like: "Joseph William Chitty, who had rowed for Oxford twice in 1849 (in the March and December races) and in 1852, umpired the race, while Edward Searle started it."
Fixed per 1875. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:42, 3 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Drinkwater noted that the placement of Tom Cottingham Edwards-Moss who was "one of the best sevens that ever rowed" at stroke was a mistake. would prefer "stated" to "noted", and "described as" over "who was". Making "described as" to the end of the quote a clause would be nice as well.
Tried to follow your suggestion. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:42, 3 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

2.02pm. MOS:TIME requires a colon and a space between the numerical value and the time standard
Yuck. "Fixed". The Rambling Man (talk) 10:42, 3 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

but with a "foul wind" in Corney Reach where's this?
About three miles in, thus noted. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:42, 3 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

When Oxford finally passed the pub, they stopped, "apparently unaware that they had not completed the course",[10] which, it was suggested by Dickie Burnell, was approximately 60 yards (55 m) too long) punctuation needed; it was suggested by Dickie Burnell → Dickie Burnell suggested, and remove the comma after "which" and "was". Seattle (talk) 23:10, 2 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed, not exactly as suggested, but I can tell you dislike my turn of phrase. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:42, 3 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks again, all comments addressed and/or responded to. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:42, 3 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

(in the March and December races) and the 1852 race was the umpire for the race, too many races in such a short span; I like the wording of the 1875 race here. Seattle (talk) 00:58, 4 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
So modified. The Rambling Man (talk) 06:33, 4 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]