Talk:The Boy Who Knew Too Much (The Simpsons)/GA1
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Ah, a Swartzwelder episode....Anyways, hey, I'll be reviewing this article. I see very little problems with the article, but some fixes would be nice:
- "It is a beautiful day in Springfield..." sounds a bit non-encyclopedic. Perhaps reword to "On a sunny and happy day in Springfield" or "Even though the day is happy and the sun is shining..." Something along those lines
- Might want to split up the reception's second paragraph. One small paragraph above a huge one looks kind of clumped and a bit tacky.
- "[...]"hilarious randomness" because of such random jokes..." sounds a bit redundant. Not sure if there'd be a way to reword it and make sense, but if so, please do so.
If those things are met I'm pretty sure this is going to be a pretty quick nom. The Flash {talk} 01:27, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
- I think I fixed everything. Thanks for reviewing! :) Theleftorium 08:51, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
No problem. Caught one more little thing; McBain's a recurring character in the series, though the way he's referred to in the cultural references makes it seem as if this was his first appearance. Fix that and it's ready, pretty sure. The Flash {talk} 14:52, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
Alright, I'm satisfied now; good job. The Flash {talk} 15:07, 3 July 2009 (UTC)