Talk:The Line (game show)/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 17:44, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing this for a review. Aoba47 (talk) 17:44, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead and infobox

The image in the infobox should have ALT text.
Link ITV Studios in the lead. And I would imagine that ITV Studios should be somewhere in the infobox.
I would revise the first sentence of the lead. I would put the information on the co-hosts into its own sentence to avoid making this sentence appear liks a laundry list of information. Then, I would include in the opening sentence what television network that the series was created for (i.e. Game Show Network).
I am not sure what is meant by “a progressive jackpot”. Could you clarify this?
In this part (or the back, of the line.), you do not need the comma after ‘back”.
I am a little confused by this wording (potential contestants). Does this mean that there are people in the line that do not participate in the contest at all?
I would break this sentence (While waiting in the line, they may be chosen to perform various challenges which can earn them additional prizes and/or a move to the front, or the back, of the line.) into two as it is rather long.
I am confused on why the running time is marked as “42-44 minutes” in the infobox. Since there is only one episode, I would imagine that the running time can be pinned down to one of these numbers in the range.
I would include information on the show’s reception in the lead.

Gameplay

There is a lot of repetition of the word “contestants” in the first and second paragraphs. I would try to avoid this.
Is the “outrageous" quote really necessary? And who is referring to these mini-games as “outrageous”?
There are a few instances of “games” in the second paragraph and some variation would be helpful here.
I do not believe that a comma is necessary before “and offering random”.

Production

Link GSN in its first instance and spelling out the acronym in its entirety on its first use.
You do not need the comma after “Amy Introcaso-Davis”.
In this section, you mention it was aired as a two-hour pilot, but the infobox has a runtime of “42-44 minutes” so I am a little confused there.

Reception

I would try to paraphrase more of the Grosvenor source rather than rely on a larger quote.
Do you think it would be worth mentioning the autistic contestant in the lead?

References

Everything looks good here.

Final comments

Wonderful work with this article. Once my comments are addressed, I will be more than happy to promote this as a good article. If you are interested, I would appreciate a review for my GAN for Chains of Love (TV series)? I was actually inspired by you to work on a game show-related article. Either way, have a great rest of your day! Aoba47 (talk) 18:22, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: Thanks, I believe everything has been addressed (see additional explanations in the edit summaries). Regarding Chains of Love (TV series), I was actually considering it, but as the most active member by far of the Game Shows Wikiproject, I fear it could be considered a conflict of interest for me to give it a review. Still, I am glad to take a look at it and copy-edit if I think it can be improved in any way. Glad to see my own work inspiring others on the encyclopedia! --Bcschneider53 (talk) 18:48, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for addressing all of my points and for the help with my article. I completely understand your point. I hope you have a wonderful rest of your day. I will ✓ Pass this as a good article. Aoba47 (talk) 20:18, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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