Talk:The Movie Album (Barbra Streisand album)/GA1
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 04:16, 16 January 2018 (UTC)
- Grabbing this for a review. I hope that I am not overwhelming you with all of these reviews. Aoba47 (talk) 04:16, 16 January 2018 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox
- I would revise this part “to sing songs about love and relationships” to avoid the “sing songs” construction. I would use something like “record songs” instead.
- Done
- Do you think that the 30 and 60 in the first paragraph should be represented in numerals? This is up to you.
- Personally, I like spelling out the characters in lead sentences, but elsewhere I'd use the "number + th" system.
- I understand; I personally find having a hard rule on numbers somewhat silly myself so I actually agree with you on this matter. I, however, wanted to raise it to your attention. Aoba47 (talk) 02:43, 27 January 2018 (UTC)
- Personally, I like spelling out the characters in lead sentences, but elsewhere I'd use the "number + th" system.
- Do you think that the formats in which the album was released should be included in the infobox?
- I personally think the editions is more important since most albums nowadays are released on multiple mediums; if you would prefer I add it in then I can
- I understand your point; thank you for the clarification. Aoba47 (talk) 02:43, 27 January 2018 (UTC)
- I personally think the editions is more important since most albums nowadays are released on multiple mediums; if you would prefer I add it in then I can
- Background and development
- Do you think that the 60, 12, and 30 in the first paragraph should be represented in numerals? This is up to you.
- ^^Comment on this above^^
- Responded to your above response. Aoba47 (talk) 02:43, 27 January 2018 (UTC)
- ^^Comment on this above^^
- Please move the link for “Moon River” up to this section as this is the first time it is mentioned in the body of the article. The same comment applies for “Calling You”.
- Done
- Inspiration and songs
- This sentence reads weirdly to me (Conducted by the orchestra, the use of violins is present on all twelve tracks.). The beginning phrase “Conducted by the orchestra” is connection to “the use of violins”, which sounds weird to me. I would revise this to read better.
- Done
- I would include the year that photo was taken in the caption. *I would include the year that “Emily” was released. Also, did the source mention the film source?
- Done
- For this part (The singer expressed interest in reocrding), you mean “recording”.
- Done
- I would include the year that "How Do You Keep the Music Playing?" was released. Also, did the source mention the film source? The same comment applies for “But Beautiful” and “You’re Gonna Hear from Me”.
- Done
- Critical reception
- I could not find any issues here. Good work with this part.
- Commercial performance
- Wonderful work with this section.
- Track listing
- Please fill in the writers and producers for the “Deluxe edition bonus disc” and “Promotional sampler edition” parts.
- Done – however, with the "Deluxe edition bonus disk", no additional information is included in the liner notes for these 3 videos so I could not add anything further.
- Understandable; thank you for the clarification. Aoba47 (talk) 02:43, 27 January 2018 (UTC)
- Done – however, with the "Deluxe edition bonus disk", no additional information is included in the liner notes for these 3 videos so I could not add anything further.
- Release history
- I think that you will need a section like this. I would check other higher quality articles on albums to see what I mean.
- Done
- Final comments
Wonderful work here. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 04:36, 16 January 2018 (UTC)
- @Carbrera: Just reminding you about this. Aoba47 (talk) 02:37, 22 January 2018 (UTC)
- Aoba47 – I (finally) completed addressing your comments. Thanks for being accommodating. Regards, Carbrera (talk) 02:40, 27 January 2018 (UTC).
- No worries; I do not see any issue with keeping a GA review open as long as needed since you let me know that you needed more time. Great work as always, and I will ✓ Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 02:43, 27 January 2018 (UTC)
- Aoba47 – I (finally) completed addressing your comments. Thanks for being accommodating. Regards, Carbrera (talk) 02:40, 27 January 2018 (UTC).
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