Talk:The Return (Kamaal Williams album)/GA1

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Reviewer: Zmbro (talk · contribs) 17:15, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey there! I know almost nothing about Kamaal Williams, but I'm bored and this looks like an interesting read so I'll review it for ya! – zmbro _(talk) 17:15, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for taking the time. 😃 웃O O 17:28, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Infobox looks good, but question. Do we have any recording dates/ranges or studio(s) available?
", under his Black Focus Records." → ", under his Black Focus Records label."
Link music videos

Background and development

Is there a specific reason the duo decided to break up?
"This style was labeled as "jazz fusion"" labeled by whom?
Is there a reason Williams chose these specific musicians to play on the record? Or were they just studio ones?

None specified. 웃O O 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Asked this in the previous section but do we have any sourced recording dates/ranges or studios available? If not that's fine I'm just wondering.

None available. 웃O O 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Composition

I'm noticing this section is very quote-heavy. I would try to paraphrase a little bit more.

Release and promotion

I'm assuming the tour went ahead as scheduled? Right now it only says it was announced.

They are just announcements. I don't recall finding a whole lot where they indeed performed at such places. 웃O O 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

The lead mentions a summary of reception, stating "some praising the re-creation of jazz-funk sounds of the 1970s, while others questioned the length of certain songs" but that's not present here. I'd make it known in this section as well.
Italicize Pitchfork
Also noticing this section to be very quote-heavy. I would check out WP:RECEPTION to assist with paraphrasing.
I'd add a summary to the start of accolades, such as "The Return appeared on numerous year-end lists in 2018." something like that
Just my personal preference, but I would put the refs into their own unsortable col. You don't have to just my preference

Track listing

Are writers available?

None specified. 웃O O 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Interesting. Don't see that often but I guess it happens. – zmbro _(talk) 19:26, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Total length?

Personnel

Looks good

Charts

I'd make the table sortable

References

Copyvio detector is showing a couple violations over 40%. As I stated earlier, I would paraphrase a bit more, as certain sections seem very quote-heavy.

Looks much better. Now it's showing less than 40%, ideally you'd want it lower, but it's definitely much better than before. – zmbro _(talk) 19:25, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I would use the actual titles instead of "AllMusic review", "Pitchfork review", etc.

I changed them all, though "Kamaal Williams - The Return" isn't really that spectacular either. 웃O O 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Archive ref 8, 21, and 26
Access date for ref 15?
Ref 22 is via wayback machine so I'd make sure that url is present.
Are there available dates for refs 8, 18, 21, 27–32?
Ref 33: is there a url or other info?

there used to be, but it wasn't the wire url. 웃O O 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Feel like there needs to be more info than just the title and website sadly. Is there a date/access date or other non-web info available? – zmbro _(talk) 19:25, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Is Tiny Mix Tapes an RS?

[1] this consensus says it should be. 웃O O 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Cool beans. I'd never seen it before so just wanted to make sure. – zmbro _(talk) 19:25, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Another question when further reviewing. Is "Piccadilly Records" supposed to italicized? Seeing it that way in the table and ref but in the text it's not. – zmbro _(talk) 19:30, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Final thoughts

Overall looks good. Gotta be less quote-heavy in some sections and got a few other things to resolve but should be a GA in no time. For now on hold. – zmbro _(talk) 17:50, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I should have resolved alot of the issues here. I hope the paraphrasing is ok, the rest of the quotes I couldn't do, at least not at the moment. 웃O O 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I just addressed those last two issues. 웃O O 23:35, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. Happy to ✓ Pass – zmbro _(talk) 18:06, 26 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]