Talk:The Stock Tip/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

Hi, I will be reviewing the article. Corn.u.co.pia / Disc.us.sion 04:00, 25 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • Lead should be expanded to summarise the whole article. Try modelling it after the lead here: The Beginning of the End (Lost).
  • I'm not too sure about the resolution of the screenshot in the infobox. Could a smaller one or version be found?
  • George and Jerry etc. are already linked in the lead. Unlink them in the plot.
  • In the lead it says: "In it, George Costanza tells...", maybe change it to "In the episode, George..."
  • When the character is first mentioned, put the actor's name in brackets, e.g. Elaine Benes (Julia Louis-Dreyfus)
  • The plot is quite long and has too many short paragraphs. Please merge them and cut down on the prose, and I will look into the plot section in more depth later.
  • Could the production section be expanded. It is fine as it is, but more information would be nice.
  • In the production section, I think it would be better if this line: "This episode was recorded in front of a live studio..." was changed to " "The Stock Tip" was recorded in front of a live studio", and likewise ""The Stock Tip" contains the first reference" be changed to "The episode contains the first reference" be changed to..."
  • Try changing the Superman section to ""The Stock Tip" contains the first reference to Superman in 'Seinfeld, a recurring feature in later episodes in the series."
  • In the reception section, change "Critics do praise some elements of this episode" to "Critics praised several elements of the episode".
  • In the production section, why does it say "however"?
  • Only one review? To be a GA, the article will need two or three more.
  • Could an online reference be found for the raings?
  • This may seem picky, but could the infobox "Season 1 episodes" section be edited so that it links to "The Stock Tip", and not "The Stock Tip (Seinfeld)"?
  • Plot section needs a copyedit.

All in all, a good article. I will be back with more comments later. Corn.u.co.pia / Disc.us.sion 04:28, 25 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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