Talk:Thistle tortoise beetle/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Justinxuje (talk · contribs)

Reviewer: Fritzmann2002 (talk · contribs) 13:36, 21 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be starting a review hopefully sometime this weekend! Fritzmann (message me) 13:36, 21 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much! Justinxuje (talk) 13:49, 21 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

First Review

My apologies for the delay! Life happened, unfortunately. Please respond to each point individually when you have addressed it; I will go through the article from beginning to end. I have taken the liberty to make some minor writing, grammar, and style changes, as well as changing the sections to the standard organization for this kind of article. Please feel free to revert any change you don't agree with or want to discuss! Fritzmann (message me) 14:55, 28 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

No worries! Thanks for all the feedback. I will work on each point throughout the next 7 days. Justinxuje (talk) 14:58, 28 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

I notice you sometimes refer to the species as just "thistle beetle". Is this another accepted name? If so you should mention that and bold it the first time it is used
- Replaced "thislte beetle" to "thislte tortoise beetle"
In most cases "this [x]" should be avoided in preference of just "the [x]"
- Fixed
I recommend combining the sentences that begin with "This beetle exhibits multiple defense behaviors..." and "The shield and excretion provide..."
- Fixed
"Its ability to massively consume and damage" is there another way to phrase this?
There should not be any references in the lead paragraph; I've removed a few that have repeated information later on, but the last sentence still has two. I recommend expanding on this info in the body using the same references, then summarizing it in the lead and removing the references from there.
- Fixed
As we go through the review, we will have to make sure that everything in the body of the article is briefly summarized in the lead. Readers should be able to just look at the lead, without reading the rest of the article, and still have a good idea of what it is about
The taxonomy parts of the lead should probably be moved to its own section. The article Tansy beetle has an example of what that would look like

Description

We will probably need to expand this section somewhat. Have you found the original description by Muller in 1776? Have there been any more complete descriptions since then? I recommend looking at Biodiversity Heritage Library and using some of the articles listed at that link. It's good stuff!
Should be split in two, with one part for larvae and one for adults
What are the differences between male and female beetles, if any?
I like how you use common traits among Cassida species for the description. Are there more commonalities you can include?

Ecology

The first sentence of "Diet" is unreferenced. What other non-thistle species do the beetles eat?
"The larvae wait until the thistle plants grow by 30%", 30% with respect to what? Same question for the nitrogen
I think the "Diet" section should be split into two paragraphs: one for larval feeding and one for adult feeding
The symbiosis with Stammera is really interesting! We may have to come back and expand on that, and it could make for a solid DYK
"Enemies" should be replaced with "predators" or "parasites" as applicable
"Oftentimes, the egg excreta after being laid that engulfs the eggs are able to protect them from predators that target them" I think this was first mentioned in the lead. A full explanation should be given here for context and flow, with references
"larvae's shield" I don't think this has been discussed yet, would definitely need to be included in the description
"coccinellid beetles with short mandibles had trouble attacking thistle beetles but they weren't able to protect themselves against those with longer or shorter mandibles" double check this sentence
"fly found in Virginia in Maryland", and Maryland?

Behavior

"Adult thistle beetles are univoltine" what does this mean?
"Oviposition depends on many conditions, ranging from rain and wind to temperature and the length of the day" explain how all those things affect oviposition
"Females usually lay their eggs on the bottom of the leaf, which occurs at higher frequencies than the topside of the leaf and the stem" the second half of this sentence is redundant
"This is thought" by whom? "It was found" by whom? We call these phrases weasel words, and they should be avoided in general; definitely remove, replace, or explain any you find
Is there any more information on their hibernation behavior?
The reproduction paragraph is also really interesting! Is there any more information on the actual behavior of reprouduction? When do the beetles mate? Do they have mating rituals? Do males mate with multiple females? And so on

Life cycle

I notice the life cycle section ends after the larvae. What about the adult portion of life? How long is that?
The third paragraph of this section probably belongs in the predators/parasites section, since it deals with that instead of the actual life cycle

As biological control

The beginning of this section is a little unclear with when it is talking about the thistle plant vs thisle beetle
Rest of the section is good! May come back to it later to nitpick a bit more but broad sweeps show it's really solid

Overall Overall, we have some work to do but a strong foundation and core! That was my first sweep, so work to complete those points. I'll go through with a finer comb after that, and also check the references to make sure that source-text integrity is good. There is definitely more info on this beetle, and GAN requires that an article be at least "broad", if not "complete". I can help you through the process, if you have more questions just let me know! 14:55, 28 March 2024 (UTC)

@Justinxuje: just wanted to make sure you are still working on this, otherwise I will close the nomination and the article can be re-nominated later. Let me know if I can give you any other assistance! Fritzmann (message me) 18:52, 4 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Fritzmann2002 I apologize for the delay. I am finishing up another beetle article that was assigned for the class and submitting that one tonight. Afterwards, I can work on these fixes by the end of this weekend. Would that be okay? Justinxuje (talk) 04:01, 5 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Justinxuje that's perfectly fine, no rush. I just wanted to double check it was still on your radar! Fritzmann (message me) 14:41, 5 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Justinxuje, following up again. If no progress is made in the next day or two I will close the nomination and it can be re-opened as a new nomination later. Fritzmann (message me) 01:37, 21 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I apologize. I am beginning my revisions now. Justinxuje (talk) 23:19, 21 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Justinxuje, I am closing the review for now due to lack of activity recently. It can be re-opened at any time! Fritzmann (message me) 22:43, 28 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]