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Reviewer: The C of E (talk · contribs) 12:26, 14 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Review is as follows:

  • Country needed after New York
  • Is there a reason the Play Center is bolded in the lead?
    • Removed.
  • "The land for the park was acquired starting in 1897, and it opened in 1902, with the first recreational facilities opening in 1905." Can we break that up?
    • Done.
  • " When built, the pools had a capacity of 1,450 or 2,600 swimmers." Contradictory. Also, references need to be in numerical order (this seems to be a running issue throughout the article)
    • The contradiction is unfortunately unavoidable as the different sources give wildly varying figures. I'm assuming the pool area could accommodate 2,600 people and the pools themselves could accommodate 1,450 people, but the sources don't say so. Epicgenius (talk) 18:03, 15 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "A similar design of hopper windows, stone pilasters, and brick swags faces the pool area" Builders WP:JARGON (or at least can we wikilink some of those)
  • The paragraph about Moses' racial views, it doesn't seem in context as there's no mention of segregation, planned or otherwise in here.
  • Further to the above, is there a reason why the park (not just pools) were mostly used by the white residents?
    • To both points, the park was mostly used by the white residents for a similar reason as the pool was. Black and Hispanic residents were scared away. Some authors think the segregation was deliberate, which is why this point is mentioned here. However, other sources dispute the notion that the segregation was intentional and that, rather, this was just a byproduct of Black and Hispanic visitors being made to feel unwelcome. Epicgenius (talk) 18:03, 15 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "These projects were not carried out due to a lack of money, and by March 1981, NYC Parks had only 2,900 employees in its total staff, less than 10 percent of the 30,000 present when Moses was parks commissioner" Can we break that sentence up please?
  • Why did the pools have a reputation for being unsafe? Had people drowned in them?
  • "one million dollars lower", Should be in numbers as per WP:£
    • Done.
  • When was the soccer field created? It doesn't appear to be mentioned prior to the closing paragraph
  • Reference 24, 33, 36 accessdate needed
    • Done.
  • Reference 80, 85, 87 author needed
  • Reference 99, I guess there's no date on it?
  • In Sources, the Cleveland Rodgers source is missing an ISBN
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.