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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:46, 8 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Comments

  • The "n.a."s in the File:Tony Hawk Pro Skater Remaster cover art.png need to be fixed, leaving them as they are is not adequate for fair use.
  • "by Activision, released " split this massive sentence here.
  • " and for Nintendo Switch in 2021" -> "later in 2021"
  • Aim to move those references out of the lead, everything in the lead should be in the main part of the article (expanded too) so can be referenced there.
  • " since Tony Hawk's Pro Skater 5 (2015). This is noted to be " -> " since Tony Hawk's Pro Skater 5 (2015) and was "
  • "fastest selling game" fastest-selling.
  • "selling 1 million copies within the first two weeks." one million. Any chance of using a different word so we're not repeating "selling" in the same sentence?
  • None of the people in the infobox are mentioned or referenced in the prose.
  • "game is a skateboarding video game" -> "game is a ... game" is poor writing.
  • "The game is a skateboarding video game.." whole para is unreferenced.
  • Apply the text change suggestions I made in the THPS5 review here.
  • "is just a remaster " remove "just", and link the "remaster" as I did in the THPS5 article.
  • "reverts, spine transfers, wall plants" what are they?
  • "a total of " no need.
  • "skateboarders; some" comma not semi-colon.
  • Don't use just bold or italics to denote something, symbols as well/instead of for MOS:ACCESS.
  • "Leticia Bufoni" missing a diacritic.
  • "Activision announced " overlinked.
  • "using Unreal Engine 4, who previously..." the "who previously" applies to Vicarious Visions, not Unreal Engine 4.
  • "handling code and layered on the code to modernize the handling" repetitive and jarring prose.
  • Oneal isn't mentioned in ref 10.
  • " Instagram, YouTube among" Instagram and YouTube, among...
  • " 2003's Tony Hawk's Underground and" overlinked.
  • If "NAVGTR Awards" are not notable enough for an article, why should they be included in this list?
  • Note b is unreferenced.
  • In refs, spaced hyphens should be en-dashes.
  • Sometimes the publisher/website is linked, sometimes not, use a consistent approach.

A few things to fix here, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 13:06, 10 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man I should have adressed all of your concerns except when noted otherwise.--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 17:33, 10 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
DasallmächtigeJ replied inline above. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 18:32, 10 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The Rambling Man Fixed it.--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 22:13, 10 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
What's "f.e." after Sports Illustrated? The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 13:18, 11 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed that as well! DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 13:42, 11 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Cool, happy with that so promoting. Good stuff. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 13:51, 11 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]