Talk:Traverse (climbing)/GA1

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Nominator: Aszx5000 (talk · contribs) 21:22, 25 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: LEvalyn (talk · contribs) 00:35, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! Looking forward to this review-- I will surely learn a lot that's new to me. ~ L 🌸 (talk) 00:35, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I feel like I don't fully understand this sentence: The term 'direttissima' (or 'direct') is used for refinements of climbing routes that dispense with traverses and rise vertically upward in the straightest possible line from the ground to the top. This makes it sound like the term only applies when a route changes and a traverse is replaced with a vertical ascent, but elsewhere in the article that doesn't seem accurate. Can you revisit this definition? It might actually be clearer if it was more concise. ~ L 🌸 (talk) 01:20, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
In the sentence about the resulting 'pendulum falls', are pendulum falls accidental? The current writing makes it sound like they are an intentional technique but it's not clear to me. The phrase A fallen climber (both the lead and following climber) is also confusing, because it's self-contradictory regarding whether one person is falling or two. Maybe break this sentence into multiple and clarify? ~ L 🌸 (talk) 01:20, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
This is a jarring way to start a paragraph: The CAG is a key metric of 'mountain traverses'.... It feels like this sentence assumes I already know what CAG is, but the explanation was buried in parenthetical aside and I missed it on my first few read-throughs. I think re-ordering the info would work: "A key metric of mountain traverses is..." ~ L 🌸 (talk) 01:20, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

For the source review, I'll look at sources 5, 9, 11, 12, 15, 16, 18, and 21 as they are numbered in this diff.