Talk:Trent Frederic/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 06:05, 30 December 2021 (UTC)

Review

NCAA

• The second sentence of the second paragraph feels too long
  • Split into two and somewhat reworded to increase active voice.

Professional

• Please WL amateur tryout contract to Hockey_contracts#Amateur_tryout
  • Done.
• The second sentence doesn't really need two references. You could use Elite Prospects as one reference for both. This can also be applied to the birthday referenced in the early life section and the final sentence of the second paragraph
  •  Done for the second sentence and birthday,  Not done for the final sentence of the second paragraph, because a fine single source is already there
• The first sentence of the third paragraph is too long
  • Split into two.
• Please WL 2020_Stanley_Cup_playoffs#Host_cities for "bubble"
  • Done.
• The sentence mentioning his fever is too long. You can put a period after it was difficult for Frederic to find his way back into the lineup
  • Done and slightly reworded.
• Maybe mention he was protected by the Bruins in the Seattle expansion draft [1]
  • Done.

International play

• where the US team thrashed the Czech Republic 9–3. IDK if the use of thrash is neutral. I also think it is a bit odd to use thrash to describe a 9–3 win as opposed to a 12–1 win.
  • Reworded.

Awards and honors

• The third row (after year) should be titled Ref
  • Done. Sometimes other people remove this one /shrug

HickoryOughtShirt?4 Everything has been addressed, except where noted. — GhostRiver 16:48, 1 January 2022 (UTC)