Talk:Typhoon Dot (1985)/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 18:00, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, YE. As a quid pro quo, I will be reviewing this article today. After a quick skim, it looks like you improved a lot compared to the articles I reviewed a few years ago, but I still do have some issues that should be fixed/addressed before I can pass.--12george1 (talk) 18:00, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"was the strongest storm of the 1985 season." - Link storm to tropical cyclone
- I've never really done that, but ok, sure. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:16, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"but dissipated next day over the high terrain" ---> but dissipated the next day over the high terrain
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:16, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"a drop in 63 mbar (1.9 inHg) over the previous 23 hours" - I think that should be "a drop of 63 mbar (1.9 inHg) over the previous 23 hours"
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:16, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"JTWC also noted that the both storm's radius" - Move "the" after "both"
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:16, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"By October 16, Dot's rate of deepening had level off." ---> By October 16, Dot's rate of deepening had leveled off.
"this time, the typhoon existed PAGASa's" - That third 'a' in PAGASA should be a capital letter
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:16, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"Due to the impeding threat of Dot," - I think the word you're looking for is "impending", because impeding means to delay or prevent, while "impending" is defined as something about to happen
- Whoops, fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:16, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, it looks decent. Just some mostly minor errors that shouldn't take too long to fix.--12george1 (talk) 18:00, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review GC. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:16, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

That was quick. I'm going to pass this article now.--12george1 (talk) 18:22, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]