Talk:Typhoon Wendy (1960)/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"Typhoon Wendy was a weak typhoon that damaged Japan in the 1960 Pacific typhoon season. " could you at least mention a month? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Better?—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:51, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
" The typhoon peaked at 140 kilometres per hour (85 mph) south of Japan." "at" implies location/time so it's kinda weird . Could " The typhoon peaked with winds of 140 kilometres per hour (85 mph) while located to the south of Japan." work? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:51, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
" Floods caused by the storm flooded thousands of homes and damaged significant tracts of land. " you use "floods" and "flooded" twice in the same sentence. Try re-writing. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Removed some.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:51, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"On August 10 at 0600 UTC, a trough was extended from Typhoon Virginia,[1] " First of all, remove the timestamp. A trough doesn't just appear out of the blew. Also, "was" makes this look like a dopey sentence. Maybe note extended southward from Virginia instead? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Noted.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:19, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Add "the" before all uses of JTWC and JMA.
- Done.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:34, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Add colons to timestamps please. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Added, did not know that.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:19, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"JMA reported a pressure of 996 hPa (29.4 inHg) at that time.[3] " you already mention this! YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Huh. Removed.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:19, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"on August 15 at 1800 UTC" to "at 18:00 UTC on August 15" or "during the evening hours of August 15" or "late on august 15". YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Done.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:19, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"The development of the storm was considered unusual by JTWC and the United States Weather Bureau (USWB).[2][1] " order the refs numerically. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Switched.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:19, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"During most of its duration, Wendy did not sustain a circulation at 200–300 mb (5.9–8.9 inHg) " why are you using pressure units in mbar here and hPA above? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:19, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"formed over an area with little divergence and a high level of convergence.[1]" that's redundant (high converge is little divergence by definition) and you mean upper level convergence right? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Yeah.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:34, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"Wendy caused damage to the Kinki and Chūbu regions from August 12 to 13.[7] " you should clarify that this is indeed Japan. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Done.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 05:08, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"The typhoon dropped around 15–20 inches (38–51 cm) of rain" metric units first, and convert to mm. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 05:08, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"and recorded winds of 67 mph (108 km/h) on Shikoku.[9] " see above. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 05:08, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"The typhoon dropped around 15–20 inches (38–51 cm) of rain[8] and recorded winds of 67 mph (108 km/h) on Shikoku.[9] " the typhoon recorded winds? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 05:08, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"7,764 hectares (77.64 km2) of land were also damaged,[7] " convert to acres not km^(2) and don't start a sentence with a number. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 05:08, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
" In small villages across the Shizuoka and Gifu prefectures, one thousand people were rescued by Japan Air Self-Defense Force helicopters.[11]" why do you spell out a thousand? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 05:08, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"1,500 climbers were stranded in the Northern Alps during the storm, with no injuries and low supplies.[12]" see two comments above. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 05:08, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"The total count was 28 casualties, 19 missing, and 154 injuries.[7] " of what? people? CFBHC users? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 05:08, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Add a note the JMA winds are 10-min and JTWC winds are 1-min. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Is that still needed when JMA didn't provide wind speeds?—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:25, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
The DT ref has a damage total. Please add it. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- There's no damage total.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:19, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Add a see also section. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:15, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Added.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:38, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Not terrific, but not terrible either. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 05:16, 22 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

(Watchlist bump) I will fix this over these couple days.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 04:30, 1 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]