Talk:UPMC Presbyterian/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 23:14, 13 January 2021 (UTC)

Andrew nyr, nice to see another hospital nominated. I'll be reviewing this soon. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 23:14, 13 January 2021 (UTC)

HickoryOughtShirt?4, Alright, I am 99% sure I fixed everything. Thank you for the detailed information on what to fix. I tried to get everything ready before the GA review, but after reading the same words multiple times they all seem to blend together. Sometimes all you need is an objective third-party. Thanks again, Andrew nyrtalkcontribs 04:17, 17 January 2021 (UTC)

Andrew nyr, thank you for the speedy fixes . I am passing the article, way to go! HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 06:17, 17 January 2021 (UTC)

HickoryOughtShirt?4, Once again, it has been a pleasure working with you. Hope to see you soon! In the meantime, Lets go Rangers! Andrew nyrtalkcontribs 06:59, 17 January 2021 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall: Pass

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• Normally I would ask if two references were needed for non-profit, but I can see this could be construed as a controversial claim so I am OK with leaving it.
• The lead is meant to summarize the article, I don't see mentions of UPMC Presbyterian is also connected via enclosed pedestrian bridges and tunnels to UPMC Montefiore hospital, UPMC Western Psychiatric Hospital, the Eye & Ear Institute, Falk Clinic, the University of Pittsburgh School of Nursing's Victoria Hall, the University of Pittsburgh's Lothrop Hall student residence, and multiple university biomedical science towers in the body of the article.

History

• Not sure how I feel about UPMC Presbyterian dates back to the dreams of Louise Wotring Lyle. Unless she actually had dreams about it, this can be seen as "promotional."
  • Side note 1: In the article, it mentions she started the hospital "on $5," can this be incorporated?
  • Side note 2: Louise Wotring Lyle should probably have an article
• Please define shortening of Pitt before its first use (ie. University of Pittsburgh (Pitt) )
• It's a bit awk to have one sentence by itself. Please merge On November 1, 1926, Children's became the first hospital in the Oakland neighborhood on the campus of the University of Pittsburgh.
• Reference 24, 31 doesn't support its claim
• Reference 28 and 29 need a specific page (and the other refs are dead)
• I think you should get rid of ref 32 because ref 33 is more reliable and contains both claims
• Please WL Polio
• Ref 34 doesn't say he went on CBS radio to report a successful test
• The Jewish Chronicle is a newspaper. Please convert ref 35 in cite news not cite web
• In 1981, add comma after date
• under the direction of Dr. Thomas E., you already mentioned his name so pls just use last name here
• Please reformat ref 41
• The last two sentences use the same ref so don't use it twice. Remove the ref after tacrolimus
• In the 1970s, the name of the hospital was changed to Presbyterian-University Hospital to reflect the increased academic affiliation., unsourced
• Please WL Andrew Schneider (journalist) and The Pittsburgh Press
  • Also, the article explicitly says Undue ER delay Andrew Schneider's article last Sunday on Presbyterian-University Hospital ("Presbyterian's emergency room criticized") from my perspective is very accurate. So, some people were for his article and others were against it.
• Ref 45 doesn't support the claim
  • Please merge In 1986, Presbyterian merged with the nearby Montefiore Hospital to create the University of Pittsburgh Medical Center, later changing the name to UPMC Presbyterian and Under Starzl, by 1988 Presbyterian Hospital had grown to have one of the world's largest transplant programs with more than half of the worlds' transplants taking place at Presbyterian into one big paragraph

Modern day

• Are three references needed for In 2017 UPMC Presbyterian chair of orthopedics, Freddie Fu performed a repair to European soccer star Zlatan Ibrahimovic's knee after Ibrahimovic tore his ACL during a game
• Can 2017 and 2018 be merged? Like just say, the following year
  • I suggest merging 2017 and 2018 pre: Tree of Life synagogue which can be its own paragraph

Awards

• Can some of the 2020 awards be merged into one paragraph?

References

• Reference 18 doesn't work for me, both the original and archive link
• Reference 21 needs a page number at least. The current link is useless unless specifics are accessed.
• Reference 26, 27, 30, are dead
• Ref 36/7 needs a page number (also, pls merge these refs as they are the same)
• Ref 47 needs a page number
• Ref 58, 80, 81, 86, 88, 115 should be cite news not cite web
  • Ref 88 should be The Patriot-News
• Clean up ref 59 and 110 (ie. author, properly format title)
• Ref 113 & 114 should have the publisher as Becker's Hospital Review
• Ref 87 needs author
• Please keep all dates used for refs consistent (ie. ref 116 says 28 May 2019 but nearly all other refs are dated like 2013-05-23)