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Note: Because the GA nomination was withdrawn, I am not placing a failed GA template on this page, as the article did not fail a GA review. I hope that my suggestions will be of use in future improvements to this article. Best wishes, GaryColemanFan (talk) 14:20, 29 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

This article could use a good copyedit and some sourcing. Many sections are unsourced, and there are writing problems evident throughout the article. A few examples will suffice for now:

The liberty rifles have done a lot of general research on this topic and can sourced as evidence for the presence of "uniformed appearance" in their "INTERPRETING RICHMOND DEPOT CLOTHING FROM A MATERIAL CULTURE PARADIGM" which has general lawton's report to congress mention the well uniformed natured of Confederate forces in Feburary 1865 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Asetpath (talk • contribs) 18:48, 17 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

  1. "grey" and "gray" - should be consistent
  2. unnecessary capitalization of military ranks in the middle of sentences
  3. "their sworn enemies" - doesn't seem encyclopedic
  4. Periods should come before references, not before and after.
  5. The numbers for stripes are very confusing. If someone wears one stripe that is one-quarter inch long, "one 1/4 stripe" is easier to understand than "1 1/4 stripe", which seems to indicate a stripe on one and one-quarter inch.
  6. "They of different colors" - errors like this should be caught before a GA review
  7. "They of different colors red for artillery officers" - punctuation after "colors"?
  8. The description on the image page for the Confederate belt buckle needs to be updated.
  9. "not fit for the heat of the lower decks of a ship" - this doesn't seem to be covered in the reference
  10. "Then a Master, the same as the Lieutenant, except that they have no star." - not a sentence
  11. "a foul anchor" - what is this?
  12. The online references in the sources and notes sections are missing information. See Template:Cite web. The video reference should also be formatted with Template:Cite video, and more information is needed.
  13. "junior-officers" shouldn't be hyphenated

I'm going to stop there, as this should be sufficient to get a sense of what needs to be fixed. On top of this, there also seems to be a shortage of information. Many sections are very brief, so the article has very little detail. Although the lead section is supposed to be a summary of the article, little of what is mentioned in the lead is repeated later in the article (detail on these topics would be helpful, as they sound interesting and would make this more of an article and less of a list).

I am going to put this nomination on hold to allow for these concerns to be addressed and/or discussed. Any questions and/or comments can be left here, as I have placed this page on my watchlist. Please note that this is not a comprehensive list of what needs to be done for GA status but rather an indication of the direction the article needs to go. Best wishes, GaryColemanFan (talk) 04:00, 25 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The article is still in need of a copyedit and more detail. The list above was not a complete list of every problem with the article, but more to show what sorts of problems exist. I recommend adding to the information and then seeking an editor who has not worked on this article to perform a thorough copyedit. GaryColemanFan (talk) 20:40, 26 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Withdrawn by nominator. GaryColemanFan (talk) 14:26, 29 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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