Talk:When You Get a Little Lonely/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 12:14, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• "McCormick intended for the songs to include different musical genres" - it should probably be clarified in the lead whether this intention was ever carried out

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• I'd clarify in the lead what Circuit City is for people who don't live in the US and are unlikely to have heard of it

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• "As of August 31, 2016" - this is unusually specific considering the context, can you just simplify to "August 2016". While we're on the subject, can't you just update it to "June, 2018" as per WP:BLUE? I'm pretty sure if she released another country album we'd know about it given her profile.

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• "a campy album of duets" - whose quote is this? Is it McCormick's?

• It is a quote from the AXS source writer included at the end of the sentence. I have revised it. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• "She later said that she regretted not taking the offer" - I'd specify the year here

• An exact year was not provided in the source. Here is the part on it (McCormick interrupts. You know, I was offered a chance to record an album after the series ended, but I wanted to go back to college and live a normal life.). Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• "McCormick received a record deal through brother's record label Phantom Hill in 1994" - this is the first mention of a date in this section. I'd mention at least one other date in the prose to give more context. How about whatever year The Brady Bunch ended?

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• Should you add 'pictured' after "Nicolette Larson's" in the image caption. I mention this as the caption mentions two women.

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• "McCormick sings with a "Nashville accent"" - according to whom?

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• "Lyrics from the album include: "don't bury me on the love prairie." - Just curious, is there any reason you're mentioning this? It seems really random to me, though I'm not familiar with McCormick or the Brady Bunch

• I just thought that it might be helpful to include lyrics from the album. This is the only reliable, third-party source that I could find that does this (and they do not even say what song it is from). I removed it as it is rather trivial. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• Just confirming - it was released as a digital download in 1995? I didn't know they had digital download that early.

• Revised. The digital source says 1995, but it is most likely referencing the original release date. I have encountered this sort of trouble with digital sellers before ><. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• "was rereleased as a "Circuit City Exclusive" in 2008 through Building" - what's Building? Also why is Circuit City Exclusive in quotes?

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• "was not "done the right way"" - this is interesting; can you expand on it any more than you already have? No worries if the source isn't any more specific.

• McCormick was pretty vague in the source. She just said that it didn't follow "certain rules in Nashville". Your guess is as good as mine on that one. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• "and told her: "Wow . . . where did you get that voice?"" - this seems a bit self-serving and unnecessary. I'd drop the quote and just leave it at "responded positively to her voice"

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

Looks good. will pass once issues are addressed. Freikorp (talk) 12:14, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• @Freikorp: Thank you for the review! I believe that I have addressed everything. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• Looks great. Happy to pass now. :) Freikorp (talk) 00:57, 25 June 2018 (UTC)