Talk:William A. Shine Great Neck South High School/GA2
GA Review
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Reviewer: Nasty Housecat (talk) 19:01, 12 January 2010 (UTC)
Hi, I have reviewed the article's GA nomination and my comments are below.
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
This article is progressing but it needs more work before it becomes a Good Article.
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
- The Lead should “be able to stand alone as a concise overview of the article” WP:LEAD and it is probably too long for an article of this length. Most of the material in the second and third paragraph might be better moved to a section for “Academic achievements.” Look at WP:BOOSTER for guidance on how to present the achievements neutrally. There are several very long lists in the article that are not well incorporated. See WP:EMBED for direction on better usage. Some of the lists (the list of AP classes for example) are overly detailed for the article. You could summarize them or do without them entirely.
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
- Most of the references are to school publications. This is okay, so long as the article is not primarily based on them (as this one is). See WP:RS#Self-published and questionable sources as sources on themselves.
- C. It contains no original research:
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- The article could benefit from a broader treatment, including information about the campus, for example. See WP:WPSCH/AG. Also take a look at some of the GA schools articles at WP:GA#Educational institutions for good examples. As a reader, I would be interested to see more about the Grammy Signature School status as it seems to be notable.
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- The School Policies section is too much detail for an encyclopedia article and could simply be omitted. Again, see WP:WPSCH/AG.
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Some of the language in the Interscholastic Sports section reads like the sports page (“has progressed incredibly,” “senior superstars,” “perennial power.” It could be phrased more neutrally.
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- More images would help to improve the article.
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- With some more attention to the lead, work on the lists, and a bit of expansion, and more external references, this could be a potential GA article. I will place the nomination on hold, which will allow seven days to make improvements if you wish, or you can resubmit any time when you feel the article is ready.
- Pass or Fail:
No response to the initial assessment and no changes since the hold. Assuming nominator is not active. Failing for now, door always open to renominate when issues are addressed.Nasty Housecat (talk) 15:33, 19 January 2010 (UTC)