User:AaronAspelund/Badminton in the United States/Annikahille Peer Review

Peer review

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General info

• Whose work are you reviewing? Aaron Aspelund
• Link to draft you're reviewing: User:AaronAspelund/Badminton in the United States

Lead

Lead evaluation

There is no clear lead to the article, but I think the history section at the beginning includes a lot of information that could be part of the lead. In order to create a clear lead, the author could write an explanation of what badminton is, how it is played (rules and equipment) and when it was created, etc. Then he could outline the rest of the article in a quick descriptive sentence.

Content

Content evaluation

The content of the article is relevant to the topic of badminton in the United States. Many of the dates referred to are 2019 or 2020, showing they are up-to-date. I think the content missing is a background of the sport itself and explanation of what it is, to give readers an overview if they are uncertain. The content about the notable badminton players and leaders is good!

Tone and Balance

Tone and balance evaluation

The content is mostly neutral. Some of the sentences, such as "January 7th 2020 marks a sorrow day for Badminton lovers" under the Diane Cornell section, are making assumptions. Instead, the facts should guide readers to assume that badminton lovers were sad due to her passing because of her influence on the sport (I think the facts can speak for themselves!).

Sources and References

Sources and references evaluation

The references section is good; the sources are relevant and mostly up-to-date with information regarding badminton in the U.S. I think the list is comprehensive and covers the info needed. The links work.

Organization

Organization evaluation

The content is concise and clearly written; however some of the sentences have grammatical errors and the flow could be a little better. Overall, the information is clear! The organization is also logical.

Images and Media

Images and media evaluation

The images are relevant and there are multiple to showcase the sport. The images are from the Wikimedia commons.

Overall impressions

Overall evaluation

Overall, the article is very well expanded from the original article! There is a lot more relevant information included from before. The content added helps readers understand the background and context of the sport, and why it may not be as popular as others. I would work on adding more basic info about the sport itself for people who have no idea how it works!