User:AleahHahn/Kuroshio Current/Laurelceleste22 Peer Review
Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
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Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
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General info
[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing?
Kuroshio current page.
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:AleahHahn/Kuroshio Current
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Evaluate the drafted changes
[edit]Lead: Nice concise lead section, although it is missing an overview of the article's main sections. Would add 1-2 sentences that introduces the article's content. Also a large gap in text after the Lead, I would suggest trying to reformat to close the gap. I would also suggest replacing the gyre image in the Lead with one that identifies the Kuroshio current specifically, as it could better orient readers.
Content: Good coverage in topics and content related to the Kuroshio current. The content is through and well-written. Nice use of images as well.
First, I think that the Marine Life section could be moved to the end, as the Climate Implications and Current Intrusion Dynamics sections seem more important. I think some additional information regarding current formation (wind direction, upwelling, Ekman transport, Coriolis effect) could be added to the Physical Properties section, in just 1-2 sentences. For the Mode Water Formation section, I would suggest defining "mode water" in one of the first few sentences, because it would help readers more readily understand that section and its importance. One idea could also be to add some information about research on the Kuroshio, like if there are long-term research or sampling programs of note.
Your tone and content is neutral, and is well suited to a Wikipedia page. The only suggestion I have is to remove the "unfortunately" within the biodiversity section, to make it more neutral. With that, I think you could remove the biodiversity background sub-section and simply discuss biodiversity as an important ecological metric in the Marine Life section, linking to the Wikipedia biodiversity page. If you decide to keep that background section, I would suggest moving it to the Marine Life section.
References: The Deep Sea Erosion section seems to be missing references, and several of the Marine Life subsections might need more references, such as the Phytoplankton and Fish subsections. It looks like a few of your references need updated dates, those are easy to fix if you edit the reference. Overall, you include many great references, and the article seems to be well cited.