User:Bugcruncher/Environmental racism/Omotayo Akingba Peer Review

Peer review

Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects:

Lead

Guiding questions:

Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content

Guiding questions:

Is the content added relevant to the topic?
Is the content added up-to-date?
Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

Is the content added neutral?
Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Sources and References

Guiding questions:

Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)
Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
Are the sources current?
Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)
Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization

Guiding questions:

Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
Are images well-captioned?
Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only

If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.

Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions

Guiding questions:

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
What are the strengths of the content added?
How can the content added be improved?

Examples of good feedback

A good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.

Peer review of "Homemaking"
Peer review of this article about a famous painting

Additional Resources

Check out the Editing Wikipedia PDF for general editing tips and suggestions.

General info[edit]

Whose work are you reviewing?

Bugcruncher

Link to draft you're reviewing
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bugcruncher/Environmental_racism?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Environmental racism

Evaluate the drafted changes[edit]

Lead[edit]

There is a lacking lead section which may still be worked on and may be added to the article at a later date.

Content[edit]

The content added is relevant as it it discusses the implications of climate change on minority communities and the impact of warming temperatures on poorer people in urban areas from increased heat trapping in concrete and lack of shading. The content seems up to date with sources added to various parts of the opening of the "Causes" section. However, it does not seem as though you have published your changes to the wider Wikipedia article. The content seems to enter the specific gap of discussing environmental racism by talking bout the excessive heat that is ravaging urban poor communities due to the structural creation of cities.

Tone and Balance[edit]

The content has a neutral tone and does not seem to be leading in its presentation of information. It is clear and concise with its description of the issue and the opinionated additions are factually sourced. The very conversation about climate change or environmental racism is pretty biased in itself as most people see racism as bad and climate change as an issue, yet the additions did not feed this bias and tried to articulate information impartially.

Sources and References[edit]

The content is well sourced with working links and accurate information contained in the sources. I do not think that these sources are the be all and end all for the topic as there are plenty of other resources to use but this is probably being done and/or is in the works. The sources also seem very current with many of them being from less than 5 years ago.

Organization and Overall impressions[edit]

The content is overall easy to read and pretty clear. It is short and concise with no errors in grammar or spelling. The section on health impacts could be expanded on but the gap in the article concerning increasing temperature of urban concrete environments is a welcome addition.