User:Cameronkalantar/Migrant education/Jennanand Peer Review

Peer review

Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects:

Lead

Guiding questions:

Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content

Guiding questions:

Is the content added relevant to the topic?
Is the content added up-to-date?
Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

Is the content added neutral?
Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Sources and References

Guiding questions:

Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)
Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
Are the sources current?
Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)
Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization

Guiding questions:

Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
Are images well-captioned?
Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only

If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.

Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions

Guiding questions:

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
What are the strengths of the content added?
How can the content added be improved?

Examples of good feedback

A good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.

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Additional Resources

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General info[edit]

Whose work are you reviewing?

Cameron Kalantar

Link to draft you're reviewing: https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Cameronkalantar/Migrant_education&veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template&redirect=no; https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Yasminemahm./Newcomer_education?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Migrant education
Newcomer education

Evaluate the drafted changes[edit]

Migrant Education Peer Review:

When I first reviewed the article, I noticed there is no bias and all the information presented is very factual and neutral. Also, the citations were properly linked and worked, however one part I would change is taking out the author and their year after the citations because they have already been included in the number citation so they are not necessary. Also, I would change the section name from "International School Solution" to the "Internationals Network Approach" or something alongside those lines. Right now the title seems to be like there is an actual international approach between countries and their school solution, so I would make a title that clarifies this a bit more. Also, when first presenting the history of the information, I'd go more in depth and talk about how many Internationals Schools there are currently and where they are located. This will only help strengthen the evidence presented in the article and I think it can be very useful. Also, you could include some facts about what the exact community college is that it originated in and be more specific. Also, I would expand on how a major focus for the Internationals Network for Public Schools is English Language Learning and maybe add why this is so important for migrants. These are just some few aspects that I feel like would help enhance the article. Overall, I feel like this paragraph will fit perfectly in with the article and will give readers more insight to the migrant education policies within the United States. The article is also very well written and does not seem to contain any spelling or grammar errors. Great job on this!

Newcomer Education Peer Review:

When I first reviewed the portion's Cameron included, I noticed there were no large biases. However, the first couple of sentences do sound a little bit bias so I would just include citations/sources for these statements so it seems to be more factual information. I really liked how you included a specific example of Moussa's school and showing a specific example of a good refugee education program. The citation did work well and I was able to clink the link to the source. Also, I liked the placement of this paragraph and I think you can incorporate this in various different places but this was a good choice as well. There seems to be no spelling or grammar errors. I just don't know if direct quotes are needed/used in Wikipedia articles, but I think the way you incorporated it is good as well. I think this is a good section to add to the article and helped enhance the article very much. Great job on this!