User:Camsara99/Marriage in ancient Greece

Page Evaluation

Lead

• The Lead is relatively ok but could use some basic upgrades to sentance structure and format to make it feel less like a list of facts.
• I want to make it a bit more of an introduction to the subject as a whole as opposed to a list of just the more stand out facts from the article.

Content

• Large portions of the sections focus on ancient Spartan traditions. Rather than have this take a large amount of space in various sections, perhaps "Marriage in Ancient Sparta" should be it's own section with a few sub-sections if needed. The same could potentially be done for Athens, as we have the most infomation about each of these city-states. This would also minimize potential for readers to mix up traditions of specific areas as being the case for all of Greece.
• There are some opportunities to link to other relevant articles that were not taken (ex. when Gorgo is mentioned without being named, despite Leonidas' article being linked in his name)
• The "Dates for Marriage" section is too short to exist as it really does. There should either be more information added or the section should be changed to a subsection in an appropriate category.
• There is some conflicting information given at times due to the way in which it is presented (ex. "Engagement" section implying that all engagements are won through competiton.)
• There is definitely more information to be added about "Marriage Celebration" - a category which would also benefit from being named a more appropraite "Marriage Traditions"
• There is also definitely more information available on "Divorce"

Tone and Balance

• The article is definitely neutral
• There was no noticalbe instances of bias.
• The article leans more towards being about exclusively about Athens and Sparta
• The article would benefit from a few sentance structure edits which would make it more pleasing to read.

Sources and References

• The sources are severely lacking, and 1 of the 2 present links doesn't work.

Organization

• The organization is ok, but could really benefit from some updates and additions.
• Some sections should be renamed and merged
• There should be a section for "Marriage in Ancient Sparta" and "Marriage in Ancient Athens" to adress the more sepcific details - these cvould maybe be addressed as subsections within each section as well

Images and Media

• The one image does not have much information.
• The image is not well-captioned
• As far as I can tell the image present adheres to Wikipedia's copyright regulations
• There should be more paintings or vases depicting relevant details which could be included

Checking the talk page

• The talk page doesn't have any very recent suggestions or updates that I feel are relevant to the updates I would like to include
• The article doesn't seem to be rated
• The article is a part of many WikiProjects

Overall impressions

• The article does not seem to have much of a status overall
• This article seems really underdevloped. I think there is a lot more information that could be included.

Potential Added Sources

The Gift in Antiquity - Marriage Gifts in Ancient Greece - From "Gift in Antiquity"

Age and Innocence: Female Transitions to Adulthood in Late Antiquity

Dangerous Gifts: Ideologies of Marriage and Exchange in Ancient Greece

Dangerous Gifts: Gender and Exchange in Ancient Greece. by Deborah Lyons. Princeton: Princeton University Press 2012.

The Gamos of Hera - From "The Sacred and the Feminine in Ancient Greece"

Ancient Marriage in Myth and Reality