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User:Cmurphy22/Acetobacter aceti/Asp2181 Peer Review

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General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Cmurphy22

Link to draft you're reviewing
User:Cmurphy22/Acetobacter aceti
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Acetobacter aceti

Evaluate the drafted changes

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The lead has been updated to include some further information about the microbe. The changes were beneficial to the background of the microbe such as adding the "ecological niches" section which uses real life examples of where A.aceti can be found. The mention of oxygen being used as the terminal electron acceptor could be discussed further on in the article or just briefly in that paragraph as to further explain what is uses the oxygen for. The cellulose production sections needs more detail on how exactly A.aceti plays a main part in bacterial cellulose production. From there you could include the last two sentences as a closure for the sub section. There's is great addition and additional information to the growth section. However, maybe the metabolism and growth sections could be combined since they both mention oxidation as a well for A.aceti to thrive and have somewhat similar contents. Overall, the changes the article are coming a long well. There are minimal grammar mistakes and everything so far flows pretty well, except for maybe the pink disease in pineapples. That section could possibly be edited or changed so it flows better with the article. Content is up to date and there are many articles to back up the metabolism section. Article has a good neutral tone.