User:Emilygeorge06/Drumming (snipe)/Emilyd1997 Peer Review

Peer Review - Emilyd1997

General info

Reviewing draft by user Emilygeorge06. Link to the draft is User:Emilygeorge06/New sandbox.

Lead

The lead is a great start! I think it could benefit from a bit more information, as leads tend to be 2-3 paragraphs. One punctuation error I would fix is in the phrase "...predators are in the area —this can benefit". Another space should be added after the dash. Also, the facts you stated should be backed up with some references.

Content

The paragraph about Naumann's theory is super interesting. You have lots of good information describing the function and mechanics of the behaviour, a big improvement from the original article. Good job!

Tone and Balance

Good, neutral explanation of the behaviour.

Sources and References

All references used are from reputable sources. As mentioned before, the Lead section could use a few more sources to back up your statements. Other than that, article is very well referenced.

Organization

The sections are well-organized and easy to follow. Only thing I would change with the organization is maybe putting the "Function" section first in the article, after the lead. I feel like if a reader were to visit this page, it would be to understand the function of this behaviour.

Images and Media

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Overall impressions

Overall you have made a huge improvement to this article! I think that once you have added in the other information that you have mentioned (more in the lead and the "types of snipe" section) this will be a really solid article. Good job!