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Article Evaluation

• Nothing distracted me from the topic throughout the article
• The article is pretty straight forward with facts, it is not biased in anyway
• PeeYes, the links work and the source is very informational and contributes to the article subject
• I see footnotes after facts that indicate that each fact has a source that is located at the bottom
• I believe these sources are neutral. There are a lot of different perspectives that I can just see in the titles of the references, which is good to cover both sides of everything.
• I see a lot of the sources have MD by them in the author names section, which is very reliable
• While in the talk page of this article, I see a lot of people talking about what the "right" definition of abortion is. I also see some users talking about some citation issues that occur in the article.
• I do not believe this article is part of any WikiProjects
• Wikipedia talks about abortion much differently than we do in class. On Wikipedia, I am seeing just straight facts, which is a good thing. In class, we talk about how it can affect women, the rights of abortions and so on. In class we would be looking deeper into the topic and discuss it on a higher level than just spitting out plain facts.

Evaluation of Gender Expression Article

• Is the article's content relevant to the topic? Are some areas under- or over-developed?
  • Yes, the content is all related to the topic. A lot of the areas are under-developed. There can definitely be more sections added to this article also.
• Is it written neutrally?
  • I think it is written neutrally.
• Does each claim have a citation? Are the citations reliable?
  • Yes, after a claim there is a citation. The citations are reliable.

First Draft 10/21

A point that many people often wonder is how people's thoughts differ on gender expression. What about how adolescents view gender expression. It has been shown that young individuals that identify outside of the gender binary are more prone to getting harassed and bullied by their peers. A big part of this is the social norms that children of today are exposed to at a very young age. Heterosexuality is the leading social norm in todays middle and high schools across the world. Being different can lead to some issues in young adolescents. Studies show that the effects of the bullying, harassing, and victimization due to sexual orientation from peers can lead to PTSD, depression, anxiety, and even suicide. Adolescents who do not conform to gender role expectations are put at a much higher risk for these symptoms rather than a child who does conform to these gender role expectations. This is all due to our societal pressure to "fit in" and stay inside the social norms.

Peer Review

I am reviewing an article on black feminism. The add in I am reviewing:

"Black women who participated in the social movements of the 60's often found themselves excluded from both the Feminist Movement and the Black Liberation movements. Many were stuck between the intersectional crosshairs of being a woman and being black. Sharon Smith claims, "In the 1960s, the contrast between white middle-class and Black women’s oppression could not have been more obvious. The same “experts” who prescribed a life of happy homemaking for white suburban women, as documented in Betty Friedan’s enormously popular The Feminine Mystique, reprimanded Black women for their failure to conform to this model. 17 Because Black mothers have traditionally worked outside the home in much larger numbers than their white counterparts, they were blamed for a range of social ills on the basis of their relative economic independence." (Smith, Winter 2013-2014). In "But Some of Us are Brave: A History of Black Feminism in the United States," done by The Thistle, an alternative news source based out of MIT, the writer explains that there was a lack of regard for black women because, "Black women who participated in the Black Liberation Movement and the Women's Movement were often discriminated against sexually and racially. Although neither all the black men nor all the white women in their respective movements were sexist and racist, enough of those with powerful influence were able to make the lives of the black women in these groups almost unbearable." (Thistle, Vol. 9.1). Throughout the 60's the idea of Black Feminism was gaining popularity, in 1973 the National Black Feminist Organization was officially created in New York."

QUESTIONS:

1. Does the draft draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view?
   1. No, I didn't feel as if I was being persuaded to feel a certain way while reading this paragraph.
2. Are there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral?
   1. I feel as if the paragraph is written very neutrally, it is not taking one side or the other.
3. Does the draft make claims on behalf of unnamed groups or people?
   1. It doesn't make claims on behalf of unnamed groups or people. It only makes claims on black women who are feminists. The article was well researched, so nothing was written that is taking a claim on behalf of unnamed groups.
4. Does the draft focus too much on negative or positive information?
   1. It is definitely focusing on negative information. The paragraph talks about how black women struggled to be included and how they were very much discriminated against.
5. Are there any unsourced statements in the draft, or statements that you can't find stated in the references?
   1. No, all of the facts are well cited.