User:Glassi12/sandbox

Article Choices

1. My top choice is the "Electronic dance music" article, and the reason this is my top choice is because first it is a topic I wish I could write about, but couldn't centralized that topic into an argument about the future. The second reason I would like to edit this wiki article is because I feel that there is a lot I could add about the timeline of the music, and also fix some of the wording ad structure the article. For example there's apart of the article that refer to EDM music producer as "dudes",so changing some of the diction of the article and in places and just make is sound

2. My second choice is the "Self-driving car" article, and the reason I would like to work on this article is because it has relevances to my topic, and I believe I could add solid information in the "Potential advantages"

3. My third choice is the "Tesla, Inc." article, and the reason I could work on this article is because this company is quite relevant to my paper. I believe I could add to some of the subtopic that relate to my topic like "Autopilot".

Article evaluation: Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games

Everything on the WikiProject is relevant to the topic. There is not a lot of information on this projects page, but all of information is fairly current with the latest edit being January 2019. The actually "Video game" article has a ton of information that seem to be current with the last edit being in March 2019. I'm not really sure what should added, as of now the main point on this projects page is poll, so maybe cleaning of the way the poll looks on the projects page. The article is neutral, seems to be almost entirely information just stating facts. The viewpoints are not overrepresented or underrepresented with over 100 different references. All the links I clicked on worked, but a lot of the links were blogs/ not the most creditable sources. The talk page is pretty empty with the only things being from early 2018 saying "semi-protected edit request" and those did not go through. There really is not a discussion going on in this article, that's differ from our class because we have strong discussion. In the "Video game" article there is a "Critiques on article" where one user is help expand the idea of another user. There is also another claim from a user saying that the facts of another user is in correct about Vector displays.

Article edits

Header

"Despite the industry's attempt to create a specific EDM brand, the initialism remains in use as an umbrella term for multiple genres, including house, techno, trance, drum and bass, dubstep, and Trap music (EDM) as well as their respective subgenres.

Added trap music (EDM) because it would not be categorized as a sub-genre, but its own genre, therefore adding it to the header add more relevant information

History: Dance music in the 21st century

Adding section

1.4.3 Trap music (EDM)

Trap music (EDM) is the originated from techno, dub, and Dutch House, but also Southern hip hop in the late 2000s and early 2010s. This form of trap music can be simplified by these three features: "1/3 hip hop (tempo and song structure are similar, most tracks are usually between 70 -110 bpm) – with vocals sometimes pitched down, 1/3 Dance Music  – High pitched Dutch synth work, Hardstyle sampling, as well as a plethora of trap remixed of popular EDM songs, and 1/3 dub (Low frequency focus and strong emphasis on repetitiveness throughout a song)".^[1] Some of the artist that popularized this genre would be producer such as RL Grime with tracks like "Core" and "Scylla" released in 2014, Flosstradamus with their "Hdynation Radio" album released in 2015 and Carnage (DJ) with his track "Turn Up" released in 2012 along with several others.^[2] Trap music in this connotation was characterized by "soulful synths, 808s, the pan flute, sharp snares and long, syrup-slurred vowels" that create dirty and aggressive beats creating "dark melodies" ^[3][4].