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Whose work are you reviewing?

Hollandaisecraver

Link to draft you're reviewing
https://en.m.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?oldid=1182896930&title=Sophie_Clarke_(healthcare_consultant)
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Survivor: South Pacific

Evaluate the drafted changes

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The overall article is well structured and is backed up by many sources .However the lead section feels empty and doesn't encompass all the other sections. Try to add the information of your sections to the lead section. It does talk about her appearances in tv shows but it doesn't mention her personal life, her reception and her filmography .

The content is good and more than enough for all the remaining sections. It's up to date and you did a good job at arranging the main points ,you added all the necessary plots, sub-plots and timelines for each section. Maybe add where she was born (her hometown) in the personal life section and add a external link to where we can watch the tv shows and the tv shows' official websites. You can add fan's reactions to her appearance on the tv show ,did she change?

The tone and balance is neutral and there is no bias , I like how you managed to convey the reason why she lost in a fair way.

Sources are all up to date , work and mention your main points. I would like to see at least one image of her ,you can maybe add it next to the lead section ?

Overall the article is complete in term of content but missing minor details that won't hinder the article's main points. Well researched and written , feels like an experienced wiki editor wrote this which is a good thing .But remember to add a brief description of your main points in your lead section.