User:JEMGC/Washington Trails Association/Nick5carr Peer Review
General info
[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing?
JEMGC
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JEMGC/Washington_Trails_Association?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Washington Trails Association
Evaluate the drafted changes
[edit]The edited article does a good job of articulating on the values of the Washington Trails Association as well as adding where their offices are located in the first paragraph. I was impressed by the amount of information that was added and the detail that it included as well. Adding almost four new paragraphs to the article definitely strengthened it and made it more fun to read about.
A couple of changes that I suggest the author applies is differentiating which information goes in which paragraph. It isn't a big problem I just noticed that sometimes sentences in one paragraph could have belonged in another to help best compile the information that belongs together.
The most important thing that the author could add to improve the article is just finding more sources with more information to add.
One thing that I noticed that I could apply to my article is how you organized you added different paragraphs to differentiate the information. In my article I didn't have as many headings that differentiated my information so this could be something useful to add.
Good job!