User:Jbains03/Homeless women in the United States/Lfreeman333 Peer Review
Peer Review[edit]
- Whose work are you reviewing?
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:Jbains03/Homeless women in the United States
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Homeless women in the United States
Evaluate the drafted changes[edit]
Your changes to the article did much to clarify the information. I was disappointed to see that there were no references included, sources were not cited, and none of the claims were supported. My suggestions are:
- I would research the information included and cite the sources for added information and that of the original article
- Cite source of information for added text, “The Great Depression in the 1930s resulted in a spike in unhoused individuals, and the large numbers of impacted individuals resulted in recognition for the difficulty these people faced”
- Cite the source of information for added text, “when rising interest rates and societal factors like the HIV/AIDS epidemic served as contributors”
- I would expand paragraph 2 by talking about how women are marginalized and neglected
- I would discuss housing instability in greater detail and explain some of the factors that lead to this issue.
- I suggest incorporating more scholarly contributions into your article