User:Julianajoy4/NorthernAttitude/Sienna Pearson Peer Review

Peer review

Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects:

Lead

Guiding questions:

Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content

Guiding questions:

Is the content added relevant to the topic?
Is the content added up-to-date?
Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

Is the content added neutral?
Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Sources and References

Guiding questions:

Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)
Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
Are the sources current?
Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)
Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization

Guiding questions:

Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
Are images well-captioned?
Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only

If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.

Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions

Guiding questions:

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
What are the strengths of the content added?
How can the content added be improved?

Examples of good feedback

A good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.

Peer review of "Homemaking"
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Additional Resources

Check out the Editing Wikipedia PDF for general editing tips and suggestions.

General info[edit]

Whose work are you reviewing?

Julianajoy4 (JJ)

Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Julianajoy4/NorthernAttitude
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): This is a new article

Evaluate the drafted changes[edit]

Lead[edit]

The lead section effectively introduces "Northern Attitude" as a song by Noah Kahan, noting its release date and album, Stick Season. The background and production details are clear, and it mentions the duet version with Hozier setting up those upcoming sections in your article. However, the lead could benefit from specifying the genre of music to set expectations for readers. A brief mention of the song's reception or other notable aspects, like chart performance, could also enhance the lead's structure. Overall though, it is concise and doesn't overstate, but might need a touch more detail to reflect the key sections in the main article.

Content[edit]

The content in the article is relevant, comprehensive, and up-to-date, with sections covering the background, song teasers, sound, and the Hozier feature. It doesn't address a specific Wikipedia equity gap, but it provides valuable insights into a well-known song. One area for improvement could be including more details about the song's impact, such as chart performance, sales figures, or reception. Additionally, exploring the influences that led to the creation of "Northern Attitude" might enrich the content further. Overall, the information is well-organized and relevant, with no content that feels out of place or unrelated to the topic.

Tone and balance[edit]

The overall tone of the article is neutral, presenting facts about without obvious bias. The descriptions of the song's themes and production are informative, yet sentences like "Kahan’s lyrics reveal that this caused him to have a more closed off heart, but in the song he asks for understanding and forgiveness." in the "Background" section could be reworded to avoid emotional overtones and not seem like you are making the connection. Maybe cite who said it or quote them directly. Although the article generally stays objective, it could potentially benefit from additional perspectives, such as music critics' reviews or fan reactions, to diversify the viewpoints and ensure a comprehensive, unbiased narrative.

Sources and references[edit]

The article references eight sources with functioning links that accurately reflect available media about the song since it is a more current/recent song. The sources appear reliable, comprising reputable music publications and websites. However, the citation frequency could be improved to ensure that all new content is properly backed up with credible references. The sources are fairly current, covering content from 2022 and 2023, ensuring the information is up-to-date. Additionally, at least one source is authored by a female music reviewer, contributing to a more diverse perspective.

Organization[edit]

The content in the article is well-written, with clear and concise language throughout. The information is presented in an easily readable format, and the sections are organized logically to reflect the major points of the topic. The breakdown into sections creates a natural flow, guiding the reader through the various aspects of the song's development and release. Although the overall writing quality is solid, there are minor grammatical errors, such as missing commas and awkward phrasing in some sections, which could benefit from proofreading. Additionally, some parts could be streamlined to avoid redundancy, particularly in the repetition of Kahan's isolated upbringing in Vermont.

Here are my suggested grammar fixes:

"In his hometown, the winters are long, chilly, and gloomy. Kahan’s lyrics reveal that this caused him to have a more closed-off heart, but in the song, he asks for understanding and forgiveness."
- Added a comma after the word "song"
"In addition to the video teaser, Kahan and Hozier generated excitement with several live performances of the song in late 2023, including a memorable rendition at Kahan's Nashville show in early October."
- Reworded an awkward sentence
"Kahan reveals that 'Northern Attitude' came about unexpectedly while experimenting with a guitar riff during a different recording session. His co-producer and the recording engineer encouraged him, which led to Kahan developing the song spontaneously, freestyling lyrics that tapped into deep-seated themes of isolation and self-discovery."
- Split up a run-on sentence

Images and media[edit]

The article includes one image, which is the album cover for the single "Northern Attitude." This image is relevant, as it helps readers recognize the song and its album. The image adheres to Wikipedia's copyright regulations, as it falls under fair use guidelines. It is well-placed within the article, positioned with the infographic/chart, providing a visually appealing layout. To improve the image's effectiveness, you could consider enhancing the caption to explicitly state that this is the cover for the single "Northern Attitude." Although this might be inferred by readers, a clear caption could aid comprehension. Additionally, you might explore including an image of the album cover for the later edition with Hozier, which could provide a visual representation of the different releases.

New article[edit]

The article meets Wikipedia's notability requirements. The sources are comprehensive enough to give a good overview, but additional perspectives, such as music reviews or industry reports, could offer a more well-rounded view. The article's structure aligns with similar music-related articles, with clear section headings and logical organization. As for discoverability, while there are some internal links, the article could be improved by linking to related topics, such as other songs by Noah Kahan or Hozier, to increase interconnectivity within Wikipedia.

Overall impressions[edit]

The article provides a comprehensive view of the song's background, production, and unique features, as well as the impact of the collaboration with Hozier. The strengths of the content include the detailed background section, which offers a personal context for the song, and the coverage of various aspects such as the song's sound, teasers, and subsequent duet release. Overall, it is a great first draft.