User:Kelmalc/sandbox
There were a lot of suggestions for this page and I think there is plenty of room for improvement. There's a section labeled "In Practice" and I think there are a lot of structural and substantive things that can be revised or added, such as linking more court cases. There are also examples of racial profiling that can be removed because they are inaccurate, and I think it would be a better idea to use examples with specific citations rather than theoretical examples. I might also consider adding more court case decisions to exemplify how this practice is enshrined in our laws.
Sources I'm considering:
Ross, Jeffrey Ian. Encyclopedia of Street Crime in America. Los Angeles: SAGE Reference, 2013. Print.
"Whren v. United States." Oyez. Accessed 15 Feb. 2017.
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After reading the article several times and heavily considering the comments on the talk page, I have created several goals for my edits:
1) Work on the neutrality and balance of arguments in this article. Several users made it clear that this article could be construed as leaning in favor of racial profiling. I also noticed that some sections bounce back and forth between their tones in terms of support or condemnation for racial profiling, so I will try and create consistency in the language and syntax. 2) Making the article more readable. The organization to this article is very hard to follow. There are many things that could be deleted for inaccuracy and incorrectness and lack of a credible citation. There is also sections that could be merged. I noticed that many of the sections could be deleted and the information contained within could be dispersed in different sections throughout the article. 3) clarification of important terms e.g., difference between race and ethnicity. Also, correcting claims of "statistical significance" unless it is citing a specific study with the correct and corresponding p-value 4) adding more citations and information on constitutional vs. statutory issues 5) making this article more globally relevant and further elaborating on issues outside of the US.