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User:Leehyu/High School Rapper/Khascall Peer Review

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General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Leehyu

Link to draft you're reviewing
User:Leehyu/High School Rapper
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
High School Rapper

Evaluate the drafted changes

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Hi, due to the lack of peer reviews of your article you're getting one from me :).

Lead

I think it would make sense for the lead to incorporate more details about how the show works, the premise, structure, and so on.

Content

I wonder why you removed the column with the notes about mentors. That seems like a problem. I think making a new section for a summary of each season makes sense, but be sure to look at what's in the season-specific articles versus what lands in the main article. There are some other articles about reality shows that I think do this well, so definitely look at those and make some comparisons.

Tone and Balance

The article so far does have some problems with promotional tone. Take a look at other reality shows to get some examples of what it looks like to write with a more neutral tone.

Sources and References

Wikipedia isn't a reference -- just link to the relevant articles. Using Korean-language sources makes a lot of sense, but I do wonder if there are any English-language sources that could also be used? You might find some ideas in the season-specific articles to help you.

Organization

Overall the organization makes sense.

Images and Media

I think the article would benefit from some images, but finding images that we have a right to use is a big challenge. Under Fair Use, we can add a logo image to the main wikipedia article -- so this seems like a good step to take after go live.

Overall Impressions

You will want to do some grammar copyediting before you call this work finished. One challenge I notice is in deciding what goes into the main article versus the season-specific article. Be sure you are looking at these articles as you build out the main article. You have more work to do, but you're making solid progress.