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User:Lshersh/Prosthesis/Kimjammer Peer Review

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General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Lshersh

Link to draft you're reviewing
User:Lshersh/Prosthesis
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Prosthesis

Evaluate the drafted changes

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  • Is the content added relevant to the topic?

I think this is an awesome addition to this article, incorporating a new section that isn't currently well covered by the existing article. It also works in a lot of the ideas we have been exploring in class, which is great.

  • Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?

It's great that all of the claims are backed up by a published paper focusing directly on the stated topic. However, I would suggest paraphrasing the information in your own words instead of quoting the sources here, as I don't think they necessitate a direct quote. Stating your claim/facts directly and just putting the citation on the end instead of using the "according to X..." structure would also make it feel more like a Wikipedia article than a student paper.

  • Check a few links. Do they work?

The citation links all work! It looks like your second citation might need its date fixed though.

  • Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?

All of the text written by you is clear and easy to read!

  • Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?

No.

  • Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Yes, there is a clear division between the two sections discussing the ethical and social aspects of prosthetics. Just curious, where are you planning to insert this section in the main article?