User:Mackenzie maybury/Sexual ethics/Christina Albanesius Peer Review

Peer review

General info

I am reviewing MacKenzie Maybury's article Sexual Ethics.

Lead evaluation:

I think the lead on the actual article is fairly well done and seeks to educate the reader on what sexual ethics is. It discusses sex as it relates to gender, orientation as either a heterosexual, homosexual, bi-sexual, pansexual, etc., mutual consent and sexual relations. The lead could benefit from a bit of reworking to be more concise overall.

Content evaluation:

I think the content of the chosen article is relevant to today's world. Sex has always played a pivotal role in society from the days of prehistoric man who one would assume engaged in sex primarily to propagate the species to modern times where people engage in sex for the purpose of pleasure only. I would agree with MacKenzie that an expanded section on sexually transmitted diseases is needed in this article as humans tend to engage in risky behaviors.

Tone and balance evaluation:

I fee that the tone of the chosen article is neutral as it can be when discussing sex. Cultural and religious norms play into a person's view of sex and sexual ethics and should be discussed. But I would say that the section on feminism and sex may need to be reworked to achieve a more neutral tone.

Sources and References evaluation:

The references seem to be up-to-date and link to a working webpage but I would say using a Wikipedia article as a reference is not advisable.

Organization evaluation:

The article itself has decent flow, but I would agree with MacKenzie that sections need to be added and or deleted to achieve a more harmonious and impartial balance on the subject. I would especially agree that from a public health standpoint sexually transmitted diseases should be addressed in a little more detail.

Images and Media evaluation:

I would agree also with MacKenzie that this article needs more images to add to the overall flow and legitimacy of the article.

Overall impressions evaluation:

I like where MacKenzie's thoughts are going as far as revising and reworking this article is concerned. It definitely comes off as more of an opinions piece rather than presenting the facts; however, this can be difficult given that sex is a hot button issue for some people. I don't think that the link between religion and sexuality should be deleted from the article as people's views on sex were definitely shaped by their religious leanings. It will be interesting to see how MacKenzie edits and improves this artilcle