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Article Evaluation

• Name of article: Friedrich Daniel von Recklinghausen

• Is the article's content relevant to the topic? All information present is relevant to Recklinghausen.
• Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? One of the sources cited lists 12 works in his written works, but only 8 are in the article. In addition, the article lists his medical discoveries, but not how he came to making the discoveries. More about his time at Würzburg could also be added, as well as elaborating on what his "important studies" on the heart and circulation were specifically about.

• Is the article neutral? The article maintains its neutrality throughout.
• Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? Information about his time as a professor are noticeably missing.

• Are all facts in the article backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? There are only two citations in the article, suggesting that more can be done to accurately cite the information.
• Check a few links. Do they work? The source links work but there are only three provided (though only two are referenced). More sources would drastically help improve the article.
• Is the article well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? There are only three main sections to the article, and only two of them are paragraph sections. Adding a section about more of his research (like his "important studies" on the heart and circulation) can help improve the article.
• Are images well-captioned? The only image provided is not captioned.

• What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic? Only two conversations are present on the talk page, both by students in this course. Tranlsating sources into English and adding info about his time teaching are suggested.
• How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects? The article is rated Start-Class and a part of WikiProject Germany and Wikiproject Biography
• How can the article be improved? As previously stated, more English sources and citations, more about how he made his discoveries and what his studies about the heart and circulation detailed, and more about his time at Würzburg and Strassburg.

Questions

Why did we choose this article? We both did it for the initial article evaluation

What's missing? Information about his studies on the heart and more about his time when attWurzburg and Strassburg.

What do we want to add? Information about previously mentioned heart studies. Anything we can accurately source.

Mtv52 (talk) 05:07, 4 October 2019 (UTC)

Academic background

He studied medicine at the Universities of Bonn, Würzburg and Berlin, earning his doctorate at the latter institution in 1855. Afterwards he studied pathological anatomy under Rudolf Virchow, the father of modern pathology, and obtained his doctorate with Virchow as his advisor. He subsequently undertook an educational journey to Vienna, Rome, and Paris. From 1866 to 1872 he was a professor at the University of Würzburg, and for more than three decades (1872–1906), a professor at the University of Strassburg. At Strassburg he helped to recruit a number of important people to the school, such as anatomist Wilhelm von Waldeyer-Hartz (1836-1921).

Contributions

In 1855 Recklinghausen wrote his inaugural thesis on Pyaemia.

In 1882 Recklinghausen released a monograph that reviewed previous literature and characterized the tumors of neurofibromatosis type I or NF-1 as neurofibromas, consisting of an intense commingling of nerve cells and fibrous tissue. NF-1 is sometimes referred to as "von Recklinghausen syndrome".

In 1889 he coined the term "haemochromatosis", and was the first to provide the link between haemochromatosis and iron accumulation in body tissue. Recklinghausen published his findings in a treatise titled Hämochromatose (1889).

He is credited with establishing a method for staining lines of cell junctions with silver, a procedure that led to Julius Friedrich Cohnheim’s research on leukocyte migration and inflammation. In 1910, he coined the term oncosis (derived from ónkos, meaning swelling). This term is sometimes used to describe Ischemic cell death. In addition, he is credited with performing important studies on the heart and circulation.

Peer Review

The draft does well with organization. I found the work to be easily navigable and well organized. They added in a new section for Recklinghausen’s early life and family, which the original article lacked. They also added more info on his academic background. I also liked how they added info to the existing article to clarify a few points made (one work was published posthumously and the original article didn’t specify that).

I would implement all the proposed changes on the Google Doc that was shared with me. The information looks to be well written and from reliable sources. The information provided in the doc would definitely improve the article by filling in much needed information.

The most important thing the authors could do is find more sources. The original article looks like it only draws from two sources. The authors have more sources lined up in conjunction with the information they have added, so they’re off to a good start. They also mentioned working with the German Wikipedia page for more structure translating, which would also improve the article.

The new article outline on the doc shows better organization and some restructuring, which my partner and I could definitely implement to our own article. In addition, we could also work with the Swedish Wikipedia page for more information and restructuring. Ktf5vd (talk) 15:38, 18 October 2019 (UTC)Ktf5vd

Peer Review Response

Thanks for reviewing our article. The Early Life and Family we thought would add to the article which I'm glad to see it did in the eyes of a reader. We are working in the Google doc to develop sentences that we can eventually add to the article. The changes add a lot to the contributions and the written works that would add more depth to the article. We have been looking for more articles throughout the project; the difficulty with Recklinghausen is that a lot of his work is in German. We are finding sources that have been translated or that is easy enough that we can translate although some of his technical work is quite difficult to translate. Would totally recommend looking into the Swedish page to develop structure or sections that you hadn't thought of yet. LukeAllison (talk) 15:23, 25 October 2019 (UTC)