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User:NortheasternUEnvironment/Jigar Shah/DevilsHolePupfishFanatic Peer Review

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General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

NortheasternUEnvironment

Link to draft you're reviewing:
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:NortheasternUEnvironment/Jigar_Shah?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Jigar Shah

Evaluate the drafted changes

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  • The original lead from article remains good, no changes needed there
  • Added good up to date content, such as when he was appointed to the Loans Program Office, and it was great to add that part on it to his new career section
  • Great idea to link his podcast! All sources seen good
  • The article maintains a neutral point of view, good work
  • There are some issues with tenses, sometimes the article is in past and sometimes in present, without much regard to if the thing being described is actually in the past or present
  • The new organization for the article makes it much easier to read! Be careful when editing all these changes into the article.