User:Ordinarynao/Secularism in India/Conner.hobson Peer Review

Peer review

General info

• User: Ordinarynao
• Link: User:Ordinarynao/sandbox

Lead

Lead evaluation

N/A, this user is adding to an existing article, so a lead for the new content wasn't written.

Content

Content evaluation

The content is relevant to the topic. I think the additions are valuable because they broaden the discussion around secularism in India. I especially like the way you tie the system of uniform civil code in Goa to Portuguese colonization, because it grounds the topic historically.

Some suggestions: I don't think you can assume the reader knows the terminology you use, unless you are linking to existing articles on wikipedia. I think you need to explain what Communalism is when you contrast it with Secularism. Likewise, your final sentence references problems in implementation but doesn't give any examples. As it stands, the final sentence doesn't really contain any information; it needs more of an explanation to make it worth including.

Tone and Balance

Tone and balance evaluation

I think the content is mostly neutral, except for the part about the BJP using the civil code rhetorically to agitate their supporters. Although true, this information could be phrased in a more neutral way.

Sources and References

Sources and references evaluation

The sources seem reliable. The links work. Some of the sources aren't recent, but that is ok since the topic is historically grounded. I like how you've used commission reports in your sourcing.

Organization

Organization evaluation

I'd suggest copyediting for grammatical errors and general clarity. Some of the sentences are too verbose and confusing. For example, I'm not entirely sure what your first 2 sentences mean. As I understand it, you are saying:

"A secular state could be achieved with a uniform civil code, but this is opposed by Communalists. The BJP supports a uniform civil code but has not implemented one."

If that is not the intended meaning, I think you should rewrite the sentences to make them more clear. Even if that is the intended meaning, the sentence structure makes it seem too complicated.

Overall impressions

Overall evaluation

The content added is valuable and enriches the conversation on Secularism in India. The strengths are both historically grounding the topic, and tying it to the modern day by mentioning the BJP. The organization needs some work, and the article could be expanded by explaining the problems you mentioned in the final sentence.