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User:PersianaAmericana23/Stockholm Alhambra Vase/TiaIvy Peer Review

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You have a great Lead section! It is straightforward, easy to understand, and short! I particularly liked the first two sentences where you provided what, where, and when, in a concise format. However, the sentences about the movement of the case in the lead section are a bit confusing to follow for someone who is not familiar with this object. Perhaps, try shortening your sentences and not providing as much detail in the Lead? You can add a section about its movements specifically in the body.

I am curious about the additions of the bronze dragon and wreath! perhaps you can focus on Karl Hårleman a little more, what was their artistic intentions for adding them? What do the dragon and the wreath symbolize?

You provided very neutral, unbiased content and you did a great job with the citations. Your image is clear and well-captioned. You provided a very detailed historical background of the vase which is great!

I also suggest adding a section titled Significance to really expand more on the importance of the Stockholm Alhambra Vase.

Overall great job, your object is very cool!