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CAREER section

Most edits need to happen within the Career section of the Wikipedia article.

Restructuring needs to happen in the first paragraph. It sets up the span of Hoffmans career but doesn't contextualize the years in which she was active.

The last paragraph is out of chronological order with the rest of the article, can be restructured and sentences placed back within the order of the section.

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"Hoffman has worked in the film industry for over 35 years, from ___ until present time. Her documentary style is influenced by her early work with small format video equipment and her experimentation while involved with the Alternative Television Movement in the early 1970s.

She met Jean Rouch, French anthropologist and filmmaker, at the International Visual Anthropology Conference in 1973. After assisting Rouch with research for a film project, Hoffman became interested in cinéma vérité and the idea of shared anthropology as influenced by Rouch."

Hoffman has collaborated with some noted feminist filmmakers such as Jill Godmilow, on The Popovich Brothers of South Chicago in 1978.

In 1996 Hoffman was Acting Director of The Documentary Center of Columbia College where, along with Ronit Bezale, she developed Voices of Cabrini. The film is about the destruction of public housing in Chicago. In 2014, Hoffman worked as executive producer for 70 Acres in Chicago: Cabrini Green, which is a follow-up documentary to Voices of Cabrini.

Some of Hoffman's major work was with the Chicago film company Kartemquin, whose output has been influenced by Rouch and his experimentation with documentary form. While at Kartemquin, Hoffman directed Golub, which went on to debut at the New York Film Festival. The mission of Kartemquin, and a guiding theme in Hoffman's work, was the principle of social inquiry, promoting social change through the medium of film. Hoffman still plays a major role at Kartemquin. Besides working with Kartemquin, Hoffman also worked with the Kwakwaka'wakw First Nation of British Columbia, producing films and videotapes about reclaiming the tribe's culture. Hoffman specifically worked with the video training program on the N'amgis Reserve so that the natives would be able to make their own tapes. While with Kwakwaka'wakw she produced such films as award-winning Box of Treasures, which was a film about the efforts to repatriate cultural artifacts. ***dates

Hoffman has collaborated with Barbara Kopple, on American Dream in 1990 and Michelle Citron, on Mixed Greens in 2004.

Hoffman's inclination for documentary led her to film work showing a behind the scenes look at Britney Spears, called Stages: Three Days in Mexico , directed by Albert Maysles. This film gave her the opportunity to be the cinematographer on Maysles' The Gates, which was a documentary on Jeanne Claude and Christo's Central Park installation. The documentary aired on HBO in 2006.

She was the cinematographer on Howard Zinn: You Can't be Neutral on a Moving Train; Sacco and Vanzetti; Nelson Algren: The End is Nothing, The Road is All. ***dates

Hoffman has worked as the producer and shot many installations at the Smart Museum of Art and The Block Museum, among others. ***dates

Hoffman currently works at the University of Chicago as a Lecturer in the Department of Cinema and Media Studies and Department of Visual Arts."

AWARDS section

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"In January 2018, Hoffman's 2002 film Stages: Three Days in Mexico kicked off the second season of the Cinema 53 screening and discussion series at the University of Chicago's Gray Center for Arts and Inquiry. The season series, "Women Make Docs," continues Cinema 53's mission to show films made by women and people of color.

Hoffman received the VOICE Media Activism Award from Chicago's Center for Community and Media in 1994 and was awarded the Nelson Algren Committee Award in 2004 for "community activists making a significant contribution to Chicago life."  She serves on the Board's Advisory Committee to the Community TV Network, a non-profit organization in Chicago which works to promote community development among underrepresented youth through the education tool and creative process of digital video production. This committee is one of the many places where Hoffman has worked in another capacity with her colleagues from Kartemquin films, including Gordon Quinn and Peter Kuttner."

FILMOGRAPHY

Title of the section needs to be changed from Films to Filmography.

I think we can do away with the description section. If we keep them, then the language and grammar of the sentences needs to be updated.

SOURCES

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