User:Scocougs7/Occupational toxicology/Ash.cobbler Peer Review
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- User:Scocougs7/Occupational toxicology
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- Occupational toxicology
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I feel as though you have not really added any information on the topic of Occupational Toxicology that was not already provided in the original article. I am unsure if you have published it elsewhere, but all that I see in your sandbox, as of 11/15/23 @9:33 am is the following:
"It focuses on substances and conditions that people may be exposed to in workplaces. While inhalation exposure and dermal exposure are most important and obvious, there is often exposure to mixtures of chemicals whose interactions may be complex. These environmental and individual exposures can impact health, and there is a focus on identifying early adverse affects that are more subtle than those presented in clinical medicine.
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You have not added any new sources nor have you added anything constructive to the article itself.
I did a quick google search of occupational therapy papers and saw a good amount of previous concerns about a variety of toxicant exposures that have been investigated in the workplace. I think this may be an interesting thing for you to look into and could include under the history aspect of this article. This information could be beneficial because it would give examples of "common" workplace exposures and what to look out for potentially. This would give you an opportunity to add some new sources to the original article as well as useful information.
here are a few links to some papers I thought might be cool just to get you on a different track:
https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.3109/15563658408992563
https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.3109/1547691X.2013.789940
https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.3109/15563650.2010.506876
https://ehp.niehs.nih.gov/doi/abs/10.1289/ehp.99107s2245
https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S209379111122002X
https://periodicos.ufsc.br/index.php/biotemas/article/view/35379
https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.1080/19338244.2018.1535482
https://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/abs/10.1111/resp.14272
https://link.springer.com/article/10.1186/s12989-020-00378-8
Hope some of these help.
My apologies I had accidentally edited the paper directly instead of putting everything in the sandbox first. I appreciate your feedback and the articles you found. Those articles do contain a lot of good information and if I were to continue making edits to this paper I would definitely reference several of them. I feel as though it would be interesting and beneficial to the article to provide examples of common chemical exposures in the workplace.