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User:ToharZamir/Ethnic enclave/Alexdaviesmorris Peer Review

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Great Job Tohar! I think you have a really strong encyclopedic voice in your article because, as a reader, each sentence felt concise, informative, and independent from the others, while still maintaining a general flow and connection to each other. I think you spread out your citations really well and provide a lot of information without making the edits seem bloated. My only note would be that I think there is a syntactical error in the first sentence of the second paragraph, but I could also totally just be misunderstanding what it says. Anyways, great work!