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The work you've done on this article so far is very well done. You sound unbiased, thorough, and explain the information extremely well. It might be possible to shorten, or combining sentences to avoid repeating information to the audience, for example: "Those who purchased the breakfast were disappointed in the quality of food they were given. Following this performance, West received backlash, mainly regarding the food served at the event, which was comprised of cold pancakes, sausage, and strips of bacon.[2]" could potentially be shortened to "Following this performance, West received backlash due to attendees' disappointment in the quality of the food served at the event, which was comprised of cold pancakes, sausage, and strips of bacon", and adjusting the sentence "Rather, the catering company said to direct concerns and complaints to the catering company itself" to avoid having two uses of "catering company" within it. I also would suggest providing a citation after the sentence "One woman shared her upsetting experience on Twitter, causing many people to blame West for the subpar breakfast given." It also seems like you had a slight error before adding the quote, as it says should twice in a row, and I believe the period after the third citation used on the page can be removed. Other than that, the information you added seems good to go, great job! Smblake3024 (talk) 07:24, 21 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]