User talk:Adriel824/Nike Blazers

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Peer review[edit]

Hi Adriel824,

I just got done reviewing your sandbox draft and wanted to let you know you did a great job. With a few minor changes, this article will definitely be rater higher.

Here is the link to the peer review: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Adriel824/Nike_Blazers/Chrisuw_Peer_Review?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_peer_review

Chrisuw (talk) 20:52, 31 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Peer review for Nike Blazers article[edit]

Hey Adriel824, here is the link to my peer review for your article. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Adriel824/Nike_Blazers/Acho98_Peer_Review Acho98 (talk) 04:02, 1 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback on your article[edit]

@Adriel824: First off, you've done a ton of work on this, added a bunch of material, and really improved things in a lot of ways.

  • It's not normal to add a citation to another Wikipedia article. You should either just link to the article or find whatever citation is on that page that supports the claim you want to make and use that.
  • The original article was marked as having the problem that it violated WP:ADVERT and WP:TONE by sounding a bit too promotional. I've noticed these problems in some of your next as well. For example, "Nike Blazer has withstood the test of time and has became a classic sneaker. Aside from its simple and classic design, the Blazer's longevity is in part due to Nike's collaborations with other clothing brands." sounds sort of promotional.

I would carefully edit the document for tone. I think if you do that, the material you have be in really good shape.

Do that and take a look at this list of suggestions for polishing your article which is a helpful set of ideas from altsalt. Many won't apply but some might. I've gone through and made a few edits to your articles to clean things up—mostly small stylistic things but there are definitely more. Look at the history to see what I've done before so you get a sense.

In any case, do a pass or two to address things I've mentioned and any of the things on the list on our website that apply and that you think will be helpful and/or improve the article. Then go ahead and make it live. —mako๛ 05:59, 14 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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