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I really like how at the beginning of your sandbox you provide a simple outline of the main four things you will be working on. It gives us a general idea of topics you plan to expand and continue research on, and provides us an idea of where the article needs to be strengthen. My understanding is that afterwards for each section you have already began writing/expanding on the article, and provide some quick links to the resources you are utilizing. The sources you are currently using are really good and a great start point for others who later want to contribute to the article. One of my suggestions would be to look at a sociology database for more information on health, poverty, and assimilation. I think there should be some studies available through Watzek. Looking at the full article, I think including some images of the museums would help garner more attention, and also provide an idea of what the museum displays. There are many ways to improve your article and the ways you have started/suggested is a good beginning, good job!Luzaguirre (talk) 05:59, 19 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Good organization, and history section. I think the most important thing to focus on now would be an introductory paragraph, as well as a broader overview on Cambodian American health issues. Then, it would be easier to transfer to the facts you provided on smoking. I'd suggest talking with the other student who shares this article with you; maybe the two of you could split up some of the sections, as you both have great information backed up with data. I was impressed with the statistics on smoking; I think it's a good idea to narrow in on specific topics relating to Cambodian Americans. Caetanomk (talk) 05:21, 25 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]