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Kelly Wallert Peer Review
[edit]After reading this, it’s clear to see that you have an idea as to what you’re writing. It is clear and concise and gets to the point. Although if I were you I would add more sections, and start to organize more. It looks like you’re using a great number of resources which helps get your point across. I think that the content overall is improved by adding maybe some images, more resources, and some in-text citations.