User talk:Appleseed4k

your edit to Rakuen (video game)

Hi -- I'm wondering about this edit you made to the article Rakuen (video game). I fixed two grammatical errors that you introduced, but more generally I'm wondering why you rewrote practically the entire article, which seems unusual. What's the advantage of your new version compared to the previous one? Joriki (talk) 10:55, 30 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

This is my first edit to wikipedia, so feel free to edit (I'm still not sure if this is how I respond to you). Other than finishing the plot where the original author left off, I also shortened the parts that were already there. Although my rewrite is about the same length as the original, the original author wrote about the first hour or so of a ten hour game, with only a brief paragraph about the rest and had not finished the plot. Since the section was only about the plot, I rewrote the article to avoid mentioning details and instead focusing on the story of each of the characters. You might not have noticed, but I rewrote the bulk of the original article into two smaller paragraphs and spent the rest of the text expanding upon the last, unfinished paragraph. Of course I'm still new so I'm wondering how to do things such as linking to other pages. Appleseed4k (talk) 21:17, 30 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]